The following report appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces A study reports that in nearby East

The statements is a report that appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council. They claim that an innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in schools and workplaces. There are so many reasons in the following statement.
First of all, the statement claims that people living in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high and it means they eat more fish. Although fish have very high consumption, it cannot prove they are all eaten by people from East Meira. It might be that these people from East Maira always made them and sold them to other places, even if they like to give fish as a gift. We need more evidence to prove this opinion. It concluded that people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. It cannot prove that people from East Meira meet less doctors because they always eat fish. We need some evidence to prove that people from East Meria are less likely to meet doctors because they are less likely to have less sickness. They might eat some medicine at home or they are very poor even if they don't have any money to meet a doctor. It does not mean they have a healthy body. We also need more evidence to prove that these people only eat fish. They may also eat vegetables and always exercise so their body is very healthy.
Secondly, the statement claims that since colds represent the post frequently given reason for absences from school and work. We need more evidences to ensure these reasons are true. Usually due to some reasons people will write a fake reason. Some people are true and others are false. So we must prove it is true.
Finally, this statement claims that they recommend the daily use of a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism. We need to know this fish oil can prevent colds and lower absenteeism. Maybe due to the diel there is a considerable difference and it does not work.
To sum up, we still need more evidences to prove it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun doctors is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...home or they are very poor even if they dont have any money to meet a doctor. It doe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, first of all, it is true, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 28.8173652695 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1690.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59239130435 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29848901424 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475543478261 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 4.96107784431 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9116103695 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.4782608696 119.503703932 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13043478261 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131703455137 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481420011267 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116271187645 0.0701772020484 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129928987337 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.235103110337 0.0628817314937 374% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 14.3799401198 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 48.3550499002 149% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.197005988 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 12.5979740519 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.66 8.32208582834 80% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1652 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.477 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.237 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 90 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 40 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.043 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.63 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.435 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.311 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5