The following is taken from the editorial section of the local newspaper in Rockingham.
"In order to save a considerable amount of money, Rockingham's century-old town hall should be torn down and replaced by the larger and more energy-efficient building that some citizens have proposed. The old town hall is too small to comfortably accommodate the number of people who are employed by the town. In addition, it is very costly to heat the old hall in winter and cool it in summer. The new, larger building would be more energy efficient, costing less per square foot to heat and cool than the old hall. Furthermore, it would be possible to rent out some of the space in the new building, thereby generating income for the town of Rockingham."
The editorial states that there is a need to tear down the entire Townhall of rocking ham and build a new one as per the proposal of some citizens. The problem with the town hall according to the editorial is it cannot accommodate more people at once comfortably. The expense so of controlling the temperature in winters seems to be high. Although, the reporter fails to mention whether an opinion survey was taken asking about the hall with the people of Rockingham or not. For example, a proper survey would have stated the requirements in an elaborative manner.
The editorial, on the other hand also fails to mention that which citizens have problem with the hall. It just mentioned some citizens of Rockingham. Were they the citizens living near the hall or away from the hall. For example, if there is any other town hall in the mid city and this town hall falls in the outskirts of the city, there should be no need to break it down completely and rebuilt. A renovation of the Townhall will be fine. That will increase the efficiency also and the heating system can be improvised during the renovation of the building. Moreover, as we see that accommodation seems to be unresolved problem then one can surely built a new town hall near by the old one with all the facilities required and rent out this one at times.
On the contrary, the editorial fails to mention the number of people involved in taking this decision. For example, what if only 20 people say and took this decision without further discussion. There must be some other pressing issues apart from expanding or contracting new Town-hall in the city. Also, the editorial does not mention exact number a people it can accommodate and how many people use the town-hall on daily basis apart from festivals and holidays. What if the the city population comes to Townhall only twice or thrice a year? In such a case the open area in the front yard and back yard can surely be used, at least during summers.
Furthermore, the editorial mentions the construction and then renting of the Townhall. The times when the town-hall is not being used the part of it can be rented. That can be done with the old town hall renovation also. For example, a new part or floor all together new can be constructed and it can be used with there are a lot of people and can be put up for renting when not in use.
In conclusion to the above editorial, town-hall construction is a must. An energy-efficient town-hall will be helpful for the citizens of Rockingham be it any age group but there will be other pressing issues in the city to be taken care off. Spending the money efficiently wherever urgent and necessary.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 475 350
No. of Characters: 2150 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.668 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.526 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.556 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.859 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.68 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.477 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...modate more people at once comfortably. The expense so of controlling the temperatu...
^^^
Line 1, column 540, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an elaborative manner" with adverb for "elaborative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...rvey would have stated the requirements in an elaborative manner. The editorial, on the other hand a...
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Line 3, column 651, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'build'
Suggestion: build
... unresolved problem then one can surely built a new town hall near by the old one wit...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 673, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...en one can surely built a new town hall near by the old one with all the facilities req...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 473, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...rt from festivals and holidays. What if the the city population comes to Townhall only ...
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Line 5, column 473, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...rt from festivals and holidays. What if the the city population comes to Townhall only ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 216, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... done with the old town hall renovation also. For example, a new part or floor all t...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, apart from, at least, for example, in conclusion, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 475.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62994138523 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448421052632 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.9493841632 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.16 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220706909322 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693731321804 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492022724555 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143992310687 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487417207254 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.3799401198 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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