The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company.
"According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."Based on a survey conducted by their own marketing department and certain comments by some reviewers, the director made flawed reasoning and drew unconvincing conclusions about the problems responsible for their shrinking market.
The advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production company stated that they should allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching more public through advertising. The statement of director fails to give several explanation needed in the memo it lacks in statistical data for the justification of their argument.
Firstly, the argument fails to give the data about how many people have attended the Super Screen - produced movies, it may be possible that the viewer were less than than other years.Further, its is not given that how many number of movies get released in the year, it may be possible that the number of movies were less than previous years.
Secondly, it states there is increase in number of positive reviews during past years but it fails to give the data of how much percent it has been increased, further it may be possible that those who had watched the movie may find it boring or not up to the mark so they either give negative reviews or may not give any reviews about movies.This doesn't mean that the contents of reviews were not reaching to their viewers.
Thirdly, the argument states that they have been producing the good quality movie so quality is not the matter, but they fails to justify that how good their movies are and how many movies have been rated good. It may be possible that the viewers may not like the movies so they refrain from watching it.They also fails to give the data of how much they spent on advertising in other years, it may be possible that in the past year they have spend more on advertising than in any other years.
In conclusion, the advertising director fails to give some required data to support its argument, he would have give the number of viewers how watched their movies. They can also give the data on the number of positive reviews they received. They would have given the rating of their movies to support their quality.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...y be possible that the viewer were less than than other years.Further, its is not given t...
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... viewer were less than than other years.Further, its is not given that how many number ...
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Suggestion: many numbers
...ears.Further, its is not given that how many number of movies get released in the year, it ...
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...r may not give any reviews about movies.This doesnt mean that the contents of review...
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Suggestion: doesn't
... not give any reviews about movies.This doesnt mean that the contents of reviews were ...
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...ws were not reaching to their viewers. Thirdly, the argument states that they ...
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... so quality is not the matter, but they fails to justify that how good their movies a...
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...movies so they refrain from watching it.They also fails to give the data of how much...
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...they refrain from watching it.They also fails to give the data of how much they spent...
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...ossible that in the past year they have spend more on advertising than in any other y...
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...advertising than in any other years. In conclusion, the advertising director ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.217270194986 0.25644967241 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.186629526462 0.15541462614 120% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0947075208914 0.0836205057962 113% => OK
Adverbs: 0.033426183844 0.0520304965353 64% => OK
Pronouns: 0.08356545961 0.0272364105082 307% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.133704735376 0.125424944231 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0473537604457 0.0416121511921 114% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.34710775631 2.79052419416 84% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0306406685237 0.026700313972 115% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0891364902507 0.113004496875 79% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.033426183844 0.0255425247493 131% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0222841225627 0.0127820249294 174% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1930.0 2731.13054187 71% => OK
No of words: 339.0 446.07635468 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69321533923 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.57801047555 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.300884955752 0.378187486979 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.212389380531 0.287650121315 74% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.138643067847 0.208842608468 66% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0560471976401 0.135150697306 41% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.34710775631 2.79052419416 84% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 207.018472906 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412979351032 0.469332199767 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.2251228464 52.1807786196 79% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 20.039408867 45% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 37.6666666667 23.2022227129 162% => OK
Sentence length SD: 110.930408615 57.7814097925 192% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 214.444444444 141.986410481 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.6666666667 23.2022227129 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 0.724660767414 184% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 3.58251231527 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 58.9056047198 51.9672348444 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.3119266055 1.8405768891 71% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.390294733992 0.441005458295 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.219574729228 0.135418324435 162% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.075415352986 0.0829849096947 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.783433058913 0.58762219726 133% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134724580546 0.147661913831 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.223395070359 0.193483328276 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698128691098 0.0970749176394 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.429498468693 0.42659136922 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0472085966453 0.0774707102158 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277519458948 0.312017818177 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764267875146 0.0698173142475 109% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 9.0 14.657635468 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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