GRE Argument Essay 19
The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
“Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read costs only $500 per employee – a small price to pay when you consider the benefits to Acme. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to take the Easy Read course.
The personnel director recommends a decision to the president of the acme publishing company which requires all the employees in the company to take the easy read speed-reading course. And he relies on some evidence which is: some companies after taking this course have increased their productivity, one graduate employee was able to read a 500-page report in 2 hours, and another graduate was promoted from assistant manager to vice president. This might seem logical at first glance; however, the personnel director has relied on some pieces of evidence that are invalid.
First and foremost, the writer did not provide any concrete evidence that other companies had increased their productivity because of the speed-reading course. The companies might be developed from another perspective like hiring some skilled employees, or experienced ones. It would be more convenient if the director gave more detail about those companies how they developed like was it all because of the easy read courses, or how they were before the course.
Second, the director got impressed by the guy who read a 500-page report in 2 hours. But one should never see the outside story; the writer did not consider what if the guy was already good at reading fast, and the course was just a little improvement. Also, the other one who got promoted; was he promoted because he increased his reading speed rate? or was it because the other vice president resigned his position? There are many other possibilities for how he took that position. This point would sound good if the director gave the rate of employees who got benefited from the course, not just one or two-person without mentioning the detail about them. Then this recommendation might be a wise choice.
Finally, the director mentioned that the cost of the course would be little compared to its benefit, which is 500$ per employee. This is not a genuine decision without knowing what the company is missing: maybe the acme company needs another skill to increase its productivity like management skills, time management skills, co-working skills. If the director gave us a report showing that the company employees do not have fast reading skills and it affects the company’s productivity, then this recommendation would be a lifesaver for the president of the acme company.
However, speed-reading is a good skill for employees and no one can deny that, but to improve the company itself, one can consider its big picture. The director did not mention any company issues that are due to a lack of not reading fast enough. And he based his decision without proper evidence.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 2139 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.929 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.635 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.608 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.339 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Or
...se he increased his reading speed rate? or was it because the other vice president...
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Line 4, column 111, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$500'.
Suggestion: $500
...ittle compared to its benefit, which is 500$ per employee. This is not a genuine dec...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... his decision without proper evidence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 434.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07834101382 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7185776587 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453917050691 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.67365269461 538% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4732032412 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8421052632 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21052631579 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342670445786 0.218282227539 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111238273489 0.0743258471296 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102763841639 0.0701772020484 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20636767479 0.128457276422 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0753695865024 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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