Hospital statistics regarding people who go to the emergency room after roller-skating accidents indicate the need for more protective equipment. Within that group of people, 75 percent of those who had accidents in streets or parking lots had not been we

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Author has stated about the accidents of the roller skate board riders. That the riders are not wearing the protective gears or the other safety equipment. argument concludes that the 75 percent of the riders has had not wear the protecting gears but the source of the data is not provided and the reason of accident is also not stated anywhere. Before making this argument a considerable to implement. there are 3 questions that need to be answer or resolve.

First of all, If the government or the other organisations provides the protective gears to the rider is it necessary that the riders will use them or they feel the requirement of wearing them. Argument itself stated that the 75 percent of the accidents are in the parking slot or in the streets. for example some kid is learning the skate boarding around his or her home it might not seem needful to wear the helmet and other all the accessories for the fifteen or twenty minute of skating. Also some people are using skate boards for the recreation. and to pass their spare time in this case riders will not think much to wear the protective gears.

Secondly, The data provided here is not having any reference or the name of conducting body. In this case the question should be arises about the authenticity of the data. Since the method through which the data is collected is not specified so there might be a case that the some of samples from the data are wearing the knee pads and other protective gears but at the time of coming to the hospital they removed them in this case they might report that patient had not wear the knee pads.

Finally, Author has concluded that the investment in the protective gears will result in the less accidents but this might not be the case since some of the patients have wear the helmet and trying to learn the skating without any professional guidance. In this case investment in establishing the professional coaching institute will also result in less accidents. For example some kid eager to learn skating can join the coaching institute rather than trying it in the parking or in the street which might risky even with the protective gears and reflection equipment. So accidents happening with the sketing students can significantly decrees in this scenario.

In the above argument author has made some of the assumptions and also the authenticity of the data is also not provided. So before considering the argument author should answer above raised questions.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Argument
...ve gears or the other safety equipment. argument concludes that the 75 percent of the ri...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'worn'.
Suggestion: worn
...he 75 percent of the riders has had not wear the protecting gears but the source of ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...f accident is also not stated anywhere. Before making this argument a considerable to ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...s argument a considerable to implement. there are 3 questions that need to be answer ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 298, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
... in the parking slot or in the streets. for example some kid is learning the skate ...
^^^
Line 5, column 493, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...he fifteen or twenty minute of skating. Also some people are using skate boards for ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 553, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
... using skate boards for the recreation. and to pass their spare time in this case r...
^^^
Line 7, column 277, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...ified so there might be a case that the some of samples from the data are wearing th...
^^^^
Line 7, column 277, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the samples') or simply say ''some samples''.
Suggestion: some of the samples; some samples
...ified so there might be a case that the some of samples from the data are wearing the knee pads...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 472, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'worn'.
Suggestion: worn
... they might report that patient had not wear the knee pads. Finally, Author has c...
^^^^
Line 9, column 94, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun accidents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...the protective gears will result in the less accidents but this might not be the cas...
^^^^
Line 9, column 146, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ts but this might not be the case since some of the patients have wear the helmet and tryin...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 351, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun accidents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... coaching institute will also result in less accidents. For example some kid eager t...
^^^^
Line 9, column 403, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to skate'.
Suggestion: to skate
...ts. For example some kid eager to learn skating can join the coaching institute rather ...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 39, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... In the above argument author has made some of the assumptions and also the authenticity o...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 123, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...icity of the data is also not provided. So before considering the argument author should ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 430.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54351421766 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.413953488372 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 636.3 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.0498442427 57.8364921388 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.631578947 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6315789474 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15047284461 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537995236314 0.0743258471296 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522088883599 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0879788329224 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635178111864 0.0628817314937 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 2021 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.689 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.492 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.954 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.643 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5