The memo in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council, it states that, the daily use of a nutritive supplement obtain from fish oil plays a vital role to prevent colds and lower absenteeism in West Meria’s School and Workplace. The author came in to this conclusion based on the clue about East Meria, where, due to high level of fish consumption, frequency of doctor visit is sparse like only one or twice per year for treatment of colds. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, three questions must be answered.
At first, Is the health of the people of East Meria directly related to the fish consumption and its frequency? The author of the argument claim that people visit the doctor only once or twice in a year for the treatment of colds due to high level of fish consumption by the people of East Meria. Perhaps, this is not a case of improving health issue. It is possible that the people of East Meria are more aware in their health. For example, they might be bathing regularly, washing their hand regularly after and before lunch or dinner, may be cover their mouth by mask while during the period of social activities. They might be vaccinated for every disease. It may be possible that the cost of health care in East Meria is affordable than other. If either of these scenario hold water, then the conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly undermined. Therefore, the author must provide the piece of evidence required as expounded above to solidify the argument.
Secondly, Are East Meria and West Meria comparable? It is possible that, the attendance level in West Meria may be influenced by some other factor as comparable to East Meria like public transportation facilities, level of standard of East Meria and West Meria. It may be possible that most of the people in West Meria work in the field for agriculture rather than other works. And one more thing that in East Meria, they use fish not the fish oil so fish and fish oil are to different things. Fish oil is the combination of fish and other ingredients while fish is just fish. So, if the above scenario is true, then the argument is considerably weakened.
Lastly, Is study report valid? Perhaps, survey data is not evenly taken. It may be possible that a few numbers of data may be taken and based on that data the report may create. It may possible that small number of people only consume a lot of fish and fortunately the data may take from these people. It is also possible that the study report may be too old like more than 10 years old, who knows? Currently, the level of attendance at East Meria might be decrease than previous years. Similarly, the author only claims about colds, that means, it may be during winter season, what about summer season? The author's claims are severely undermined if any of the above possibilities come to pass. As a result, in order to adequately support their argument, the author must present the previously specified piece of evidence.
In Conclusion, In conclusion, as it stands now, the argument is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the three questions above and offer more evidence, perhaps in the form of a systematic research study, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation the proposal that the daily use of a nutritive supplement obtain from fish oil plays a vital role to prevent colds and lower absenteeism in West Meria’s School and Workplace
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 763, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this scenario' or 'these scenarios'?
Suggestion: this scenario; these scenarios
... is affordable than other. If either of these scenario hold water, then the conclusion drawn i...
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Line 4, column 302, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ly the data may take from these people. It is also possible that the study report ...
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Line 4, column 616, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'claim'.
Suggestion: claim
..., what about summer season? The authors claims are severely undermined if any of the a...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 55.5748502994 155% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2945.0 2260.96107784 130% => OK
No of words: 616.0 441.139720559 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78084415584 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98190197535 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62647488062 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 204.123752495 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.418831168831 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 928.8 705.55239521 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.4802423557 57.8364921388 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.551724138 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2413793103 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65517241379 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220371126682 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645004012247 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740641706504 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132286192647 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528436871072 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 763, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this scenario' or 'these scenarios'?
Suggestion: this scenario; these scenarios
... is affordable than other. If either of these scenario hold water, then the conclusion drawn i...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 302, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ly the data may take from these people. It is also possible that the study report ...
^^
Line 4, column 616, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'claim'.
Suggestion: claim
..., what about summer season? The authors claims are severely undermined if any of the a...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 55.5748502994 155% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2945.0 2260.96107784 130% => OK
No of words: 616.0 441.139720559 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78084415584 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98190197535 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62647488062 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 204.123752495 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.418831168831 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 928.8 705.55239521 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.4802423557 57.8364921388 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.551724138 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2413793103 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65517241379 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220371126682 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645004012247 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740641706504 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132286192647 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528436871072 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.