An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author argues that the government of Tagus should take necessary steps to promote the new type of millet in order to save people from the deficiency of vitamin A. Stated in this way, the author failed to mention several key factors on the basis of which the argument needs to be evaluated. To justify the argument the author further mentioned that people of Tagus are already using it as food so they won't need to take much effort to adopt the variety of millet. However careful scrutiny of the argument provides little credible support to the author's view. Hence author's argument is considered as incomplete and unsubstantiated.
First of all, the author failed to mention whether people of Tagus are already having a deficiency of Vitamin A or not. Since many people are already using millet as food so it would be inadequate to consider them as deficient in Vitamin A. Moreover, it would be necessary to know more about the people who not eating millet food and lacking deficiency in Vitamin A. If that is the case, then instead of wasting money on other variety of millet, the government should promote Millet food instead of the new variety in order to save their money as well as saving people from lack of deficiency of Vitamin A.
Furthermore, it would be necessary to know the exact usage of millet. If the usage is already low, then the government should not allow farmers to produce it in higher quantity since it makes the farmer's efforts futile for production and also responsible for wastage of government's money. Thus, if the author had provided the use of millet, it would make the argument more cogent.
Finally, the author wouldn't consider any other cheap option for the treatment of vitamin A deficiency. Since it is a known fact that various fruits and vegetables contain a high amount of nutrients which could easily enhance the vitamin A amount in the human body. If that is the case then it would be a waste of time and money in producing the new breed of millet. Hence, if the author had considered some other treatment for lack of deficiency of Vitamin A, the argument would have been more adequate in order to analyze it.
In conclusion, the author's argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide clear concrete evidence, perhaps by the way of a reliable survey about the number of people who are deficient in vitamin A in Tugas. Finally, to better assess the argument, it would be necessary to know that why the author had chosen to produce the other variety of millet in a higher amount even knowing that it people are already using it as food.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 462 350
No. of Characters: 2128 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.636 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.606 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.453 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.225 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.398 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 563, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...e credible support to the authors view. Hence authors argument is considered as incom...
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Line 7, column 21, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...ent more cogent. Finally, the author wouldnt consider any other cheap option for the...
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Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...er to analyze it. In conclusion, the authors argument is unpersuasive as it stands. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, in conclusion, as well as, by the way, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 460.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71304347826 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48927377601 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.413043478261 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 709.2 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1636882143 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.105263158 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2105263158 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26315789474 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281828660096 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100863113241 0.0743258471296 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690541110691 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173841617042 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625317925664 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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