In the argument, the author has mentioned that the people of impoverished nation of Tagus are vitamin A deficient and an organisation has engineered a new breed of millet having high amount of vitamin A. The government should do everything possible to promote this new type of millet to fight against the vitamin A deficiency. Here in the argument, there are many questions which are not answered and if these answers are not in favor of the conclusion then this conclusion can not be drawn.
First, the author does not mentions the percent increase in the vitmin A in this new breed of the millet than the already existing source. And there are few more question, like how is the quality of the millet? How much will it help to combat the Vitamin A deficiency? Are there any side effect of this new millet? If any of the answer of the above mentioned question does align with the conclusion, the author can not claim the conclusion. If the answer aligns with the conclusion the government will be sure that this breed can be distributed in the public for consumption.
Next, the author mentions that this breed are costly than existing ones and the givernment will subsidize the prices for farmning. but the author does not mention the end amount that a farmenr has to pay in order to buy these seeds afer subsidizing the prices. What if the prices are still higher even after subsidizing it? The second question which come to my mind is, what if this new seeds need some extra care or should be farmed differently? If they answer of these questions are not in favor of the conclusion, then the production of this breed will be less which wont be enough to combat the vitamin A deficiency.
Finally, the argument does not say anything about the taste of this new breed. It does say that the millet is a staple food in Tagus, but it does not comment anything about the impoverished nation of Tagus, What id the people of impoverished does not prefer the millet and what if they dont like the taste of thnis new breed. If this hold true, then it likely that no one will consume the food with millet in it. Even if the govenrment supplies this new breed, ther won't be any effect on the vitamin A deficeincy.
In the end, there are many question hidden in the argument which need to answered in order to substantiate the conslusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In the argument, the author has mentioned that the people of impoverished nation of Tagus are vitamin A deficient and an organisation has engineered a new breed of millet having high amount of vitamin A. The government should do everything possible to promote this new type of millet to fight against the vitamin A deficiency.
Error: organisation Suggestion: organization
Error: vitamin Suggestion: vital
Sentence: First, the author does not mentions the percent increase in the vitmin A in this new breed of the millet than the already existing source.
Error: vitmin Suggestion: within
Sentence: Next, the author mentions that this breed are costly than existing ones and the givernment will subsidize the prices for farmning. but the author does not mention the end amount that a farmenr has to pay in order to buy these seeds afer subsidizing the prices.
Error: givernment Suggestion: government
Error: farmning Suggestion: farming
Error: farmenr Suggestion: farmer
Error: afer Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: If they answer of these questions are not in favor of the conclusion, then the production of this breed will be less which wont be enough to combat the vitamin A deficiency.
Error: vitamin Suggestion: vital
Sentence: It does say that the millet is a staple food in Tagus, but it does not comment anything about the impoverished nation of Tagus, What id the people of impoverished does not prefer the millet and what if they dont like the taste of thnis new breed.
Error: thnis Suggestion: thing
Sentence: Even if the govenrment supplies this new breed, ther won't be any effect on the vitamin A deficeincy.
Error: govenrment Suggestion: government
Error: ther Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: vitamin Suggestion: vital
Error: deficeincy Suggestion: deficiency
Sentence: In the end, there are many question hidden in the argument which need to answered in order to substantiate the conslusion.
Error: conslusion Suggestion: conclusion
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argument 1 -- not exactly
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 1878 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.471 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.412 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.073 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'mention'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: mention
...be drawn. First, the author does not mentions the percent increase in the vitmin A in...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mention'
Suggestion: mention
...be drawn. First, the author does not mentions the percent increase in the vitmin A in...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 132, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...will subsidize the prices for farmning. but the author does not mention the end amo...
^^^
Line 8, column 287, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... not prefer the millet and what if they dont like the taste of thnis new breed. If t...
^^^^
Line 10, column 23, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun question seems to be countable; consider using: 'many questions'.
Suggestion: many questions
... A deficeincy. In the end, there are many question hidden in the argument which need to an...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, so, still, then, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59427207637 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49947334693 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.403341288783 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 595.8 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6771850519 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.315789474 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.89473684211 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396790208871 0.218282227539 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132210185483 0.0743258471296 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104755963924 0.0701772020484 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220183206154 0.128457276422 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129952575344 0.0628817314937 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.3550499002 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.5979740519 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.