An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In this argument, the author stated that, an international organization has developed a new breed of millet which can solve the vitamin A deficiency for the impoverished people of Tagus. While one might take this as a victory for the Tagus government, there are issues which needs to be discussed.
Firstly, the author stated that, the new breed of millet are costly. But it didn't give us a number. Although, it is also stated that, the farmers will be given subsidy; will the subsidy be enough for the farmers of the Tagus? Proper data should be presented to evaluate the situation. Otherwise the whole plan can crumble.
Secondly, we are talking about a breed of millet which can eradicate the deficiency of vitamin A. But no testing data is presented here. As the millet is costly, the government should do more research before introducing it in the large scale.
On the other hand, Just the people are poor, that doesn't mean that they only have vitamin A deficiency. This new breed of millet might solve the vitamin A problem, but what about the other vitamins and minerals they need to be healthy. Also it is not practical to just force people to develop new eating habit. The people of Bangladesh are adapted in eating rice three times a day, just like newyorkers who like hot dogs. People can't change their eating habit overnight. So the government should be meticulous before taking this decision.
The author proposed a fantastic idea for the betterment of the indigent people of Tagus. But before taking any decisions further regarding this issue, the argument should provide more data regarding costs and the nutrition situation and if possible the government should should research on the products which won't change the countrymen's food habit.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 300 350
No. of Characters: 1429 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.162 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.763 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.481 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.765 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.316 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 76, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... new breed of millet are costly. But it didnt give us a number. Although, it is also ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 285, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...be presented to evaluate the situation. Otherwise the whole plan can crumble. Secondly, ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 51, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...er hand, Just the people are poor, that doesnt mean that they only have vitamin A defi...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 236, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...s and minerals they need to be healthy. Also it is not practical to just force peopl...
^^^^
Line 4, column 429, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ke newyorkers who like hot dogs. People cant change their eating habit overnight. So...
^^^^
Line 5, column 264, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: should
...ituation and if possible the government should should research on the products which wont cha...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, talking about, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 55.5748502994 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 297.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92592592593 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54188462187 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515151515152 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.9636243346 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2777777778 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383924687292 0.218282227539 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107708187431 0.0743258471296 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106572078594 0.0701772020484 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210481009586 0.128457276422 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100544201653 0.0628817314937 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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