lowering rate of accidents
The president of Alta manufacturing company proposes a reduction in the number of working hours by one hour. The suggestion comes from the fact that the company has experienced a 30% increase in the number of accidents compared to its neighbour, Panoply. The idea behind he Presidents proposal, is that having the same working hours as Panoply company will also reduce the number of accidents by increasing the amount of sleep of the workers. The presidents claims is dubious, based on unjustified claims that reducing the working hours will mean automatic increase in sleeping hours and that increasing the the amount of sleep will reduce the number of accidents.
The president is of the view that reducing the number of working hours will reduce the rate of accidents. This claim is based on comparison with Panlopy Company , the neighbour which has a lower accident rate. Basis the claim on this alone isn't enough. the president is assuming that the lower accident rate is attributed to less number of work hours. what evidence is there to come to this assumption? accidents in workplaces are caused by many factors. Faulty machines can be the cause. lack of proper training of workers also increases risks of accidents .one would also ask are the safety measures the same between the companies? some accidents are caused by lack of proper safety measures . perhaps, Panlopy company has more robust safety measures compared to Alta manufacturing Company. To set the argument on a more sound footing, the president needs to demonstrate that factors such as safety measures, lack of training do not affect the rate of accidents and that its only the number of hours causing the higher rate of accidents.
Secondly, the president proposes the reduction of working hours to increase the sleeping hours of it workers. this suggestion seems unreasonable One would ask how will the company ensure that the workers will use that extra hour to sleep ? People do spend their time away from work differently, some use the time visit friends and families, read books. In short, there is no guarantee that reducing the number of working hours will increase the number of hours sleeping . unless there is a way to impose a rule and supervise the workers to make sure they use the extra hour to sleep, the proposal in not feasible. to validate the claim, the president needs to proof how the extra hour will be used to sleep.
in conclusion, the president's claims are based on unjustified claims that the amount of sleep is directly linked to the rate of accidents. The argument also rests of other unjustified assumption that reducing the amount of working hours will reduce the rate of accidents. In order to substantiate the claims, the presidents needs to show that the higher amount of accidents is a result of an extra hour of work and all other factors and working conditions are the same with the nearby Panlopy Company
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2429.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 493.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92697768763 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59107591562 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.375253549696 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 755.1 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6887275398 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.208333333 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5416666667 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.875 5.70786347227 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 27.0 5.25449101796 514% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195272894817 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770688868868 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113434181079 0.0701772020484 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136397388905 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141981764042 0.0628817314937 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.