The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The author cites that modifying water flow of first five floors of sunnyside increases their savings by managing whole tower's water flow. To support his claim author also provide some baseless information about their increase in profit. However, this claim is full of loopholes and flourish questions regarding its assertion. Like, on which basis he claim that corporation's profit increases only because of modifying water flow? How many profit they get from this modification? Is expenditure less than profit or not? Due to this kind of loopholes, we can say that this argument have baseless information.
First of all, on which basis he can say that modifying five house waterflow increase whole building's water flow? According to this, we can say that he have not any kind of right to talk about whole building on basis of five houses. The author should give specific numeric data how it effect to other houses of building. He also give some kind of relationship between modifyiing five house water flow and whole building. So, one can easily understand profit of this modification.
Second question rises with this argument is that how many profit they get after this modification? Is profit is more than cost of this modification or not? In claim author cites that there is no available of actual data but we can say that it will increase saving of sunnyside building. If the author wants to convince public with his claim, he must provide exact detail of profit. He also provide numeric data how much the modification costs to them? So, one can actually estimate profit of this modification. Hence, this kind of information increases faithfulness of public whose houses are in this building.
Furthermore, it also stir up question how much person suffers from the problem of low pressure water? The author cites that some people complain about low pressure of water is not important. The author should provide information about how the complaint really suffers? He also provide information that it will be solved or not. Because problem for some people, one cannot consider profit for whole society.
In conclusion, I just want to say that The author should provide valid information, numeric data and it's effect on people. Hence, to prove this claim valid the author should modify his data with facts and numeric information.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 352, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'claims'.
Suggestion: claims
... its assertion. Like, on which basis he claim that corporations profit increases only...
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Line 1, column 435, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun profit seems to be countable; consider using: 'many profits'.
Suggestion: many profits
...ly because of modifying water flow? How many profit they get from this modification? Is exp...
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Line 3, column 285, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effects'?
Suggestion: effects
...hould give specific numeric data how it effect to other houses of building. He also gi...
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Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gives'.
Suggestion: gives
...ct to other houses of building. He also give some kind of relationship between modif...
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Line 5, column 54, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun profit seems to be countable; consider using: 'many profits'.
Suggestion: many profits
...on rises with this argument is that how many profit they get after this modification? Is pr...
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Line 5, column 391, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'provides'.
Suggestion: provides
...provide exact detail of profit. He also provide numeric data how much the modification ...
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Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'stirs'?
Suggestion: stirs
... this building. Furthermore, it also stir up question how much person suffers fro...
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Line 7, column 278, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'provides'.
Suggestion: provides
...w the complaint really suffers? He also provide information that it will be solved or n...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'really', 'regarding', 'second', 'so', 'in conclusion', 'kind of', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.268691588785 0.25644967241 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.123831775701 0.15541462614 80% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0841121495327 0.0836205057962 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0514018691589 0.0520304965353 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0584112149533 0.0272364105082 214% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.13785046729 0.125424944231 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0163551401869 0.0416121511921 39% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.59340915027 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0210280373832 0.026700313972 79% => OK
Particles: 0.00233644859813 0.001811407834 129% => OK
Determiners: 0.0677570093458 0.113004496875 60% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0327102803738 0.0255425247493 128% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0210280373832 0.0127820249294 165% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2341.0 2731.13054187 86% => OK
No of words: 387.0 446.07635468 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.04909560724 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.57801047555 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.346253229974 0.378187486979 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.232558139535 0.287650121315 81% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.173126614987 0.208842608468 83% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.113695090439 0.135150697306 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59340915027 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 207.018472906 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43669250646 0.469332199767 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.7651712526 52.1807786196 88% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.039408867 130% => OK
Sentence length: 14.8846153846 23.2022227129 64% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.9878076778 57.7814097925 43% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0384615385 141.986410481 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8846153846 23.2022227129 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.576923076923 0.724660767414 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.58251231527 223% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 38.1404293381 51.9672348444 73% => OK
Elegance: 1.81 1.8405768891 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173094315395 0.441005458295 39% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.127427380237 0.135418324435 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0974875119343 0.0829849096947 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.471465140701 0.58762219726 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.14054781021 0.147661913831 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651450152294 0.193483328276 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417156623074 0.0970749176394 43% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.328463699812 0.42659136922 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.110416922449 0.0774707102158 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128662721644 0.312017818177 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321832260779 0.0698173142475 46% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.33743842365 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 6.46551724138 170% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 14.657635468 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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