Manned space flight is costly and dangerous. Moreover, the recent success of a series of unmanned space probes and satellites has demonstrated that a great deal of useful information can be gathered without the costs and risks associated with sending men and women into space. Therefore, we should invest our resources in unmanned space flight
The letter provided to the editor of national aeronautics magazine concludes that we should invest our resources in unmanneed space flight as it involves lesser cost and risks. However, I found this argument to be fallacious in serveral aspects.
Firstly, letter says that manned space flight is costly and dangerous than unmanned space flight.
It has not mentioned what is the exact difference in terms of statstics. If there was a record of any accident
happened in the past with manned space flight, we could have believed that manned space flights are risky. However, no such incidence is mentinoned. Additionally, it is mentioned that manned space flights are costly than unmanned spaced flights but, it is not mentioned that if that extra cost really matters? What if the difference is really small but benefits are comparitively more in manned space flights? We just dont know.
Secondly, It is mentioned that unmanned space probes can be used to gather useful information rather than
using manned space flights. In cases where manual intervension is required to collect important information these space probes would fail or require robots to perform same task. This will increase cost and need to exclude idea of using unmanned space probes.
Additionally, it is not verifed that if the information collected by manned space flights can be collected by unmanned space probes. What if some information required can be collected by only manned space flights.
For examples, all the celestial bodies have programmed computers and chips incorporated in them. In cases where working of these program fails. There is a need of human to debug it. Although, these can be done from the ground but hardware defects might need manual intervasion.
While there are many reasons because of which statement given in the letter fails to justify why unmanned space probes are better. It could have been more clear if exact statstics of cost involved and risk was mentioned. Also examples were provided where unmanned space probes have done work done by manned space flights. Because of lack of evidence one cannot decide whether we should invest more resources in unmanned space flight.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The letter provided to the editor of national aeronautics magazine concludes that we should invest our resources in unmanneed space flight as it involves lesser cost and risks.
Error: unmanneed Suggestion: unmanned
Sentence: However, I found this argument to be fallacious in serveral aspects.
Error: serveral Suggestion: several
Sentence: It has not mentioned what is the exact difference in terms of statstics.
Error: statstics Suggestion: statistics
Sentence: However, no such incidence is mentinoned.
Error: mentinoned Suggestion: mentioned
Sentence: What if the difference is really small but benefits are comparitively more in manned space flights?
Error: comparitively Suggestion: comparatively
Sentence: We just dont know.
Error: dont Suggestion: don
Sentence: In cases where manual intervension is required to collect important information these space probes would fail or require robots to perform same task.
Error: intervension Suggestion: intervention
Sentence: Additionally, it is not verifed that if the information collected by manned space flights can be collected by unmanned space probes.
Error: verifed Suggestion: verified
Sentence: Although, these can be done from the ground but hardware defects might need manual intervasion.
Error: intervasion Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: It could have been more clear if exact statstics of cost involved and risk was mentioned.
Error: statstics Suggestion: statistics
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 355 350
No. of Characters: 1788 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.341 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.037 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.49 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.136 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.37 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd risks. However, I found this argument to be fallacious in serveral aspects. ...
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Line 5, column 75, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pace flight, we could have believed that manned space flights are risky. However,...
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Line 5, column 381, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lly small but benefits are comparitively more in manned space flights? We just do...
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Line 5, column 421, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... more in manned space flights? We just dont know. Secondly, It is mentioned that...
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Line 7, column 106, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to gather useful information rather than using manned space flights. In cases whe...
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Line 12, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...efects might need manual intervasion. While there are many reasons because of ...
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Line 14, column 222, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...f cost involved and risk was mentioned. Also examples were provided where unmanned s...
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Line 14, column 300, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nned space probes have done work done by manned space flights. Because of lack of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 355.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20563380282 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56920866572 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498591549296 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9530067313 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1363636364 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 5.15768463074 174% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.405601166447 0.218282227539 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122360262658 0.0743258471296 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109616461678 0.0701772020484 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199230572194 0.128457276422 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113922748111 0.0628817314937 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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