The argument that cow flu inoculations should not be administered due to the risks they carry may seem logical at first glance. However, the author provides unreasonable claims and connections about what a vaccine entails. Therefore, the arguement is flawed and unconvincing.
First, the writer assumes cow flu vaccines are particular due to the fact that they cause death. This assumption is flawed because almost all medical procedures carries their own risks. Minor procedures, surgeries, and even the seasonal flu vaccine carries the risk of death, though it may be small. This small risk of death however, does not prevent these life-changing practices from continuing daily at all medical facilities. It is not reasonable to halt cow flu inoculations on the sole basis that they may be lethal.
Additionally, the writer illogically concludes that the risk of death by the cow flu vaccine outweighs the number of lives that can be saved. As history has shown, the vaccine has always been worth the risks they brought along. Smallpox, for example, used to be feared as a deadly disease that plagued early U.S. civilization. It was not until Edward Jenner disocovered the vaccine for smallpox that many lives began to be saved. Although there had been some reports of death due to the vaccine, the eventual result was practically nation-wide immunity. To assume the risks of the cow flu vaccine outweight its benefits is illogical due to the countless lives that can inevitably be saved.
The argument that the cow flu vaccine should not be routinely administered due to its risk of death would be strengthened by evidence that supports that fact that the vaccine has directly caused death. Providing research or studies that show a causal relationship between the vaccine and fatality would provide more weight to the vaccine's risk of death. In doing so, the author would be able to provide a more founded argument on why the cow flu vaccine should not be routinely administered.
Overall, the author is not necessarily mistaken in discussing the significant of the cow flu vaccine's risk of death, as that is an issue that is always seriously assessed in any medical process. However, to assume that the cow flu vaccine is particular in its risk of death and that same risk outweighs its benefits compared to any other medical procedure is unfounded. In order to strengthen the argument against the vaccine, the author would have to show additional information/research that supports a more correlative relationship between this specific vaccine and death. Otherwise, it is not reasonable to argue against the vaccine due to its claimed risk of death.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11926605505 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86349513888 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44495412844 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.9 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2895979216 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.285714286 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7619047619 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.70786347227 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 6.88822355289 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151577522924 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586659822393 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477990046575 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102039123957 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281409697618 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11926605505 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86349513888 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44495412844 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.9 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2895979216 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.285714286 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7619047619 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.70786347227 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 6.88822355289 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151577522924 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586659822393 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477990046575 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102039123957 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281409697618 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.