Mayor Switzer has been the mayor of Auburn for the last year and a half. In the last year, crime rates have gone up, unemployment has increased and many businesses have moved out of town. Voting mayor Switzer out will help solve Switzer’s crime problem, will help create jobs and will prevent businesses from having to move.
How would you rate the accuracy of the above statement? Support your position with reasons and examples.
The argument that the mayor Switzer who has been in power for one and half a year in the town of Auburn has become a pivotal reason in the raise of the crime rates and depletion of the employability rates, is not actually backed with solid evidence.The proposed claim seems to be naive and needs more supporting evidences before drawing the conclusion.
First it is reported that the city of Auburn's employability rate started dwindling when the mayor is in power. But without statistics that provide the actual figures or information it will not be appropriate to draw the conclusion that the employability rate went subpar in the town. There can be multiple outside factors that might have hampered the employability rates:one such case is the ongoing pandemic covid-19 where most of the companies struggled to make a appreciable profit and thereby were put in an unforeseen situation like never before that led to the pay cut and that resulted in the mass layoff of the employees. Without proper knowledge in the statistics of the present or past employability rate and the external influence of the town that migh have affected the job prospect in the town, we can not jump to the conclusion that the mayor Switzer must be held accountable.
Second when talking about the crime rates, proper justification of the type of crime and the time/place of the crime event that took place, also in addition to that whether there have been repeated crime rates that started showing up or is it like a one big crime that shook the entire town recently.There can be occasions like the town might have hosted or be in a part of a big religious or regional festival that could have attracted a vast variety of foreigners and there could have been the possibilty of the crimes reported during the festivals. May be through investigation, the caught guilt might have originated or visited the town Auburn from outside. If this is the case then the town Auburn would be attributed to false claim of being a place that serves as the breeding grounds for the criminals. Lack of clarity about the crime rate and the type of criminal cases that the city encountered, does not help in supporting the statement.Also it is stated that the companies/business are shifting their places but provides no information about the type of business that decided to migrate and what are the total business or companies that earlier has been functionable in the town, there could be cases where a multiple less profit business might have migrated from the town. So the claim about the 'business moving away from the town' needs to be supported with relevant information about the business type,the profit made by each individual company, reason for opting out and the number of business that are moving out.
Third case there could have been a personal hatred to the maryor-in-power and thus might have led to the spread of false propoganda either by the mayor's political foe or by the people of certain groups who refute the mayor to remain in the power. Also this raises yet another important speculation about all the claims made. There could have been the cases like the media or the press run by the opposite power might have deliberately acted to belie the state of the current mayor.
If the proper evidence backed with solid information is presented, then we could have made an appropriate stand about the claim that was made but without any data or evidence it becomes difficult to completely agree to the statement.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 607 350
No. of Characters: 2861 1500
No. of Different Words: 256 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.964 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.713 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.53 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 40.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.824 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.591 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...not actually backed with solid evidence.The proposed claim seems to be naive and ne...
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Line 3, column 465, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...most of the companies struggled to make a appreciable profit and thereby were put...
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Line 5, column 301, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...ime that shook the entire town recently.There can be occasions like the town might ha...
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Line 5, column 557, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...imes reported during the festivals. May be through investigation, the caught guilt...
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Line 5, column 948, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...es not help in supporting the statement.Also it is stated that the companies/busines...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...es not help in supporting the statement.Also it is stated that the companies/busines...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...vant information about the business type,the profit made by each individual company,...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...efute the mayor to remain in the power. Also this raises yet another important specu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, second, so, then, third, thus, in addition, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 11.1786427146 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 27.0 13.6137724551 198% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 55.5748502994 155% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2907.0 2260.96107784 129% => OK
No of words: 600.0 441.139720559 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.845 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94923200384 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69829112588 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 204.123752495 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443333333333 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 920.7 705.55239521 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 22.8473053892 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 135.106930441 57.8364921388 234% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 207.642857143 119.503703932 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.8571428571 23.324526521 184% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299246635829 0.218282227539 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102842532375 0.0743258471296 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625605102952 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151065679243 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691162918481 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.8 14.3799401198 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.31 48.3550499002 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 12.197005988 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.68 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 98.500998004 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 11.1389221557 169% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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