Milk and dairy products are rich in vitamin D and calcium—substances essential for building and maintaining bones. Many people therefore say that a diet rich in dairy products can help prevent osteoporosis, a disease that is linked to both environmental and genetic factors and that causes the bones to weaken significantly with age. But a long-term study of a large number of people found that those who consistently consumed dairy products throughout the years of the study have a higher rate of bone fractures than any other participants in the study. Since bone fractures are symptomatic of osteoporosis, this study result shows that a diet rich in dairy products may actually increase, rather than decrease, the risk of osteoporosis
Form the autor argument it's no necessary true more people avoid consuming diary product. but there is no sign about people may not interest on dairy products that's why they left dairy products.
No evidence here that prove rich diet on dairy based products will prevent the bone weaken. However, people if left dairy that does not mean their bone will be strong enough. osteoporosis, a disease won't be increase in that case. author survey the people started avoiding dairy products, but did not mention what percent of people were in his survey or what percent of people bone become weaken in his survey .
Therefore, author did not mention if people leave-taking dairy products, how can they get vitamin D and calcium; which bolster bones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: But
...e people avoid consuming diary product. but there is no sign about people may not i...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...ople may not interest on dairy products thats why they left dairy products. No evi...
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Suggestion: Osteoporosis
... mean their bone will be strong enough. osteoporosis, a disease wont be increase in that cas...
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Suggestion: Author
... disease wont be increase in that case. author survey the people started avoiding dair...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... people bone become weaken in his survey . Therefore, author did not mention i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.6327345309 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 55.5748502994 14% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 621.0 2260.96107784 27% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 125.0 441.139720559 28% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.968 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.34370152488 4.56307096286 73% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29337615756 2.78398813304 82% => OK
Unique words: 84.0 204.123752495 41% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.672 0.468620217663 143% => OK
syllable_count: 187.2 705.55239521 27% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8412365505 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7142857143 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27620564622 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128816430007 0.0743258471296 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618157633392 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180417124889 0.128457276422 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0143006629213 0.0628817314937 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 98.500998004 31% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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