The owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex has made an assertion in his letter to the manager of the complex stating that by restricting the waterflow of the showerheads throughout all the twelve buildings in the complex would lead to greater improvement in profit. To support his conclusion, he predicts the water fee after the modification is going to decline. Additionally he also cites that few problems have been found since the modification. Although the argument by the owner seems convincing, several critical questions must be answered before we could take faith in the prediction.
To begin with, the owner believes that the water fee paid by the Sunnyside Corporation would decrease after the modification. However the owner has not checked the actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment, thus no evidence is given to support the prediction. Is it possible that water usage would stay unchanged or even increase after the adjustment? In fact, it is entirely possible that the modification woud lead to little change or even reverse change in water usage as the owner expected. For instance, people living in those buildings might increase the time to collect the same amount of water as before after they found the change in maximum water flow. Some of them could have underestimated the amount of water already collected due to the restricted water flow and got too much more water than before. Without considering these factors, we can hardly be convinced in the prediction that water usage would decline after the change.
Secondly, the author claims that problems with the showerhead have been reported other than some complaints on the water pressure, implying that no other problems have occured due to the adjustment. However, is the small number of complaints reported revealing the actual satisfactory attitude of the dwellers in those buildings? There is possibility for other situations. For example, some problems with the pipes and normal water flow might have been fixed up by the house owners themselves. People might also have chosen to hire professional workers to cope with some severe problems with the water flow out of inconfidence in the management apartment. Other people could have directly reconstructed their water supply system to restore previous maximum water flow and hide the fact. Without ruling out these factors, the conclusion that no problems have occured is not sufficiently cogent.
Moreover, the author of the letter recommends the same modification to be made in all the twelve buildings in the complex, assuring that woud result in more dramatic inflation in profit of the company. To expect the same effct in the other buildings as the previous 3 buildings, the conditions of the buildings are required to be similar enough. However, is the situations of the other buildings similar enough with that of the previous 3 buildings so that they could be compared together? It is entirely possible that the owners of houses in the other 9 buildings tend to use rather amount of water regardless of maximum water flow, which would break the illusion of decreased water usage. They could also be likely to complain to the owner of the complex because of trivial problems in the water supply, making the owner of the complex busy with processing various complaints. It is also probable for some of them to unite as a whole to demand the company to restore the maximum water flow of showerheads so as to protect their own rights, in which case the modification might not get successfully done. Without considering these factors, it's unconvincing tho predict that the generalization of the adjustment would lead to profit increase.
In sum, the author failed to provide sufficiently cogent answers to several critical questions, rendering the recommendation unfounded as it stands. To bolster the claim, the owner of the complex should investigate the change of actual water usage before and after the modification. In addition, he should also survey about the dwellers' opinion about the modification.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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also need to argue that:
the change of the new shower heads is also a cost.
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flaws:
No. of Words: 663 350 //write the essay in 30 minutes. can put less arguments in the essay body.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 663 350
No. of Characters: 3356 1500
No. of Different Words: 259 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.074 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.062 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.701 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 241 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 180 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 128 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 79 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.679 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.523 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.503 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 373, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...r the modification is going to decline. Additionally he also cites that few problems have be...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... would decrease after the modification. However the owner has not checked the actual re...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1008, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...e the maximum water flow of showerheads so as to protect their own rights, in which case...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 329, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'dwellers'' or 'dweller's'?
Suggestion: dwellers'; dweller's
...dition, he should also survey about the dwellers opinion about the modification.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 111.0 55.5748502994 200% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 16.3942115768 177% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3423.0 2260.96107784 151% => OK
No of words: 663.0 441.139720559 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1628959276 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.07432619952 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78847925756 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 204.123752495 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.417797888386 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1067.4 705.55239521 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.22255489022 261% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8898513888 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.25 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6785714286 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318426559714 0.218282227539 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917570497512 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651074231826 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184196527896 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733466145738 0.0628817314937 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 98.500998004 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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