Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
In this letter, the author points out the decrease of shoppers in Central Plaza due to the popularity and increase of skateboarding in the Plaza. The author of the letter asserts that many owners are facing a dip in their business due to the increased number of skateboard users in the plaza. This argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the unwarrented assumptions that the skateboarders are causing the Central Plaza owners to lose business, rendering its conclusion invalid.
Firstly, the author blames the increase in skateboarding for the decrease in shoppers in Central Plaza over the past two years. To relate skateboarding with shoppers does not seem to fit well to me. The overall decrease in shoppers may have caused due to completely different reasons. Maybe the shop owners of Central Plaza overcharge for their products making people hesitant to buy things from them and that might have led to a decline in the business. It could also be possible that due to the construction of a newer plaza right beside Central Plaza might have attracted more customers there. In fact, if there is an increase in the number of skateboarders in the Plaza, there will automatically be an increase in the business of store owners as more people will purchase stuff from the Plaza. So without a clear evidence blaming skateboarding for causing a dip in business is too critical.
Furthermore, the author also thinks that due to increased skateboarding there has been an increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the Plaza. There are also other people visiting the mall excluding for the skateboarders. It might be quite possible that they are equally responsible for littering and vandalising the Plaza. It might also be the case that the owner of the Central Plaza does not have a proper cleaning and sanitisation staff in place leading to a dirty and unclean place. If the argument had substantiated the allegations that the skateboarders were the ones vandalizing and littering, it still would have to prove that these actions were leading to a decline in business.
Finally the authors recommendation is for the city to prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. Dong this, the author assumes that businesses will return to its high again if skateboarding is banned in Central Plaza. I think this assumption of author is pretty absurd and only relies on predictions. If the skateboarders are prohibited to enter, this will inturn lead to even a further decline of customers in Central Plaza. Everybody nowadays cannot afford a car or a bike, a skateboard helps them to save time and complete their shopping in a faster way. So this again states that the authors arguments are flawed and lacks mettle.
Therefore, in conlcusion I would say that the authors argument is filled with flaws and incomplete with incogent reasons. Had the author kept the above suggestions in mind, this argument would have been bolstered much better with valid facts, evidences or statistics. The argument would also be more convincing and well-reasoned.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 510 350
No. of Characters: 2529 1500
No. of Different Words: 225 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.752 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.959 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.833 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.457 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.68 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.3 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.489 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: There are other; There are also
...ter and vandalism throughout the Plaza. There are also other people visiting the mall excluding for ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...e leading to a decline in business. Finally the authors recommendation is for the c...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... a decline in business. Finally the authors recommendation is for the city to prohi...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...arguments are flawed and lacks mettle. Therefore, in conlcusion I would say tha...
^^^
Line 9, column 47, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ore, in conlcusion I would say that the authors argument is filled with flaws and incom...
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Line 9, column 331, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o be more convincing and well-reasoned.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, i think, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2586.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 510.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07058823529 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88789383389 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443137254902 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 805.5 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7366218087 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.44 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38254779181 0.218282227539 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115650788404 0.0743258471296 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115671999736 0.0701772020484 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224558115186 0.128457276422 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153776351259 0.0628817314937 245% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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