People should not be misled by the advertising competition between Coldex and Cold-Away, both popular over-the-counter cold medications that anyone can purchase without a doctor's prescription. Each brand is accusing the other of causing some well-known, unwanted side effect: Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness. But the choice should be clear for most health-conscious people: Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and is used by more hospitals than is Coldex. Clearly, Cold-Away is more effective.
In the above argument the author is trying to compare two medicines ,and suggesting the users to not get misled with their advertise.However, the author is clearly supporting Cold-Away over Coldex.The only reason to support it is, it arrived much before Coldex.The author is also giving advice to buy this medicine without doctors prescription.
There are various medicines to cure cold which are available in the market so giving description about the two is inappropriate.The author has not given any proof or reviews that this two are better than the rest.So,comparing only these two medicines doesn't hold any ground.The author also suggested to take it without a doctor's prescription,but it is also possible that the chemist would not give the medicine without the doctors prescription.Additionally its would be senseless to give advice of purchasing a medicine without doctors prescription.
Also,the author is not knowing which age group person is going to take the medicine.The medicine consumed by a child is not the same that a doctor would suggest a toddler. Additionally the immune system,resistance power is different from child and adult.The conclusion to this is that the author should have provided proof or surveys by which one can take medicine on his own.
In the age of marketing every company is in a race to make its product seem well in comparison to another.So,they accuse each other with some sort of unwanted or side effect.The author is saying that Cold-Away is accusing Coldex for contributing in high blood pressure,but the author has not mentioned the proof on basis of which the company is saying that.Additionally high blood pressure is a result of many factors.A single effect might not cause it.Cold-Away is also known for causing drowsiness.However there are many factors which lead to drowsiness.It might be possible that the chemical reaction in some people would be different than other.So,coming to a conclusion that it causes drowsiness to all people is baseless.
The author is mentioning that Cold-Away is more effective than Coldex. The author has not provided any important point or proof to support to it.the only reason to use it mentioned by him is that Cold-Away arrived much earlier than Coldex. However it is completely baseless to use a medicine on the basis of its arrival to the market.Additionally it would also be possible that the new medicine might be more effective than the old medicine.The composition of each medicine would be different so,it would suit different kind of people.The medicine of people who are already suffering from certain disease would be different than those who are not.
The conclusion to this passage is that the author has not provided major evidences to prove his point.He would have strengthened his views by mentioning the reviews of certain doctors to prove his point.Also he would have to mention surveys between groups of people who have tried both the medicine and are giving Cold-Away more preference than Coldex.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 518 350
No. of Characters: 2473 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.771 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.774 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.573 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 179 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 47.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.773 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.438 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.736 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.173 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, well, kind of, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.6327345309 188% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2542.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 487.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21971252567 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24438697251 2.78398813304 117% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431211498973 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 803.7 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 54.0 22.8473053892 236% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 196.391395552 57.8364921388 340% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 282.444444444 119.503703932 236% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.1111111111 23.324526521 232% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 46.0 5.25449101796 875% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20703012158 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0992451268723 0.0743258471296 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539368867235 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115941839462 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485458036361 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.2 14.3799401198 210% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 8.21 48.3550499002 17% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.5 12.197005988 209% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 12.3882235529 234% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 23.6 11.1389221557 212% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 11.9071856287 244% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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