Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have

Upon first reading, Pirouettes Ballet School sounds like an excellent option. However, on closer inspection there are questions to be asked. It is not necessarily clear that it is the correct choice for all children.

Pirouettes clearly prides itself on the calibre of its teachers and on its ability to produce world class ballet dancers. This statement though does not fully quantify what that success rate is, merely quantifying their statement with the word "many of our students". Without a concrete quantification we cannot accurately compare Pirouettes with any of the other schools in Elmtown.

Even if Pirouettes did prove to be the best school for producing top class ballerinas, this does not qualify it as the best choice for every single child in Elmtown. It is quite possible that some children do not dream of being professional performers but instead want to learn ballet as a hobby. Are Pirouettes really suggesting that their "intensive programme" is the best choice for these children? Perhaps they would be better off at one of the less focused schools.

Finally, the cream of a crop in any field (be it ballet or mathematics) are not always the best teachers. Many students may agree with this, having had a teacher who was apparently a world leader in their discipline yet was unable to clearly convey the basics of the subject. Pirouettes assertion that their teachers " have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world" does not guarantee their ability to pass this talent onto their subjects.

in summary, Pirouettes claim, of being the best ballet school for all children is not yet fully supported. However their arguments can be remedied. The school should quantify how many of their students go on to become professionals compared with the other schools in Elmtown, exhibit that their teachers are renowned for their teaching as well as their performing, and show that they have levels of class for those not hellbent on becoming professional ballerinas. With these alterations, Pirouettes' assertions would stand on firmer ground.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
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Suggestion: However,
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Discourse Markers used:
['apparently', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'well', 'in summary', 'as well as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.237726098191 0.25644967241 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.149870801034 0.15541462614 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0749354005168 0.0836205057962 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0826873385013 0.0520304965353 159% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0594315245478 0.0272364105082 218% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.136950904393 0.125424944231 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0335917312661 0.0416121511921 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.83882176653 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0180878552972 0.026700313972 68% => OK
Particles: 0.00258397932817 0.001811407834 143% => OK
Determiners: 0.0956072351421 0.113004496875 85% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.015503875969 0.0255425247493 61% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0077519379845 0.0127820249294 61% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2118.0 2731.13054187 78% => OK
No of words: 341.0 446.07635468 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.21114369501 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.57801047555 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.390029325513 0.378187486979 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.275659824047 0.287650121315 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.214076246334 0.208842608468 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.137829912023 0.135150697306 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83882176653 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 207.018472906 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557184750733 0.469332199767 119% => OK
Word variations: 61.0217879567 52.1807786196 117% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0588235294 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.7896087686 57.7814097925 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.588235294 141.986410481 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0588235294 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.705882352941 0.724660767414 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 47.6248059341 51.9672348444 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.3982300885 1.8405768891 76% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50190032278 0.441005458295 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0653798786417 0.135418324435 48% => Sentence sentence coherence is low.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0493651870572 0.0829849096947 59% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.498195460884 0.58762219726 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.142496075292 0.147661913831 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175712024051 0.193483328276 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103840016359 0.0970749176394 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.270385282404 0.42659136922 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0891699689141 0.0774707102158 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.31493263228 0.312017818177 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787471677695 0.0698173142475 113% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.33743842365 132% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 5.36822660099 19% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 14.657635468 48% => More topic words wanted.
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