Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The argument at first seem to be quite impressive and may attract a lot of attention. But after a close examination the reality may seem different.The author is self contradicting the argument by saying, on one hand that Pirouettes Ballet School is the best dance school and on another hand, there are more prestigious ballet and dance companies .Also, the extreme language used to argue seems little discursive. As a result, it is difficult to agree with the statement.
The most bromide remark is the assumption that author is declaring the institute to be the best among Elmtown. The self declaring nature of the author seems little arcane. One cannot judge whether the institute is the best unless proved otherwise. If some survey conducted by well known magazine was to declare that after examining different schools, Pirouettes Ballet School (PBS) was the best, then that would be more appealing. Without evidence it is difficult to believe the author. It may be his fawning nature to attract the students by giving such statement. Or it may be legit at the same time.But we just cannot assume anything before a proper study.
Also, author claims that the institute has the best teachers employed in the academy. Considering the teachers were working for the most prestigious companies all over the world, why did they chose to join the PBS in particular. This is little vague. A teacher who is employed in worlds best company naturally is inclined to work for it rather than quitting the job their and working in PBS. It might the case that teacher was not so good in her job that he/she was fired from it. Circumstantially he/she was forced to join the PBS. Again without conducting a proper study one cannot know. Had the author mentioned more specifics about why the teachers left former institution and joined PBS, it would have been more elucidating.
Moreover, same is the case with students who are graduated from PBS. The students studying in best school, as declared by author, should be more likely to join PBS after their graduation. But there is no evidence provided about the same.Also, the students who have left the school are claimed to be working for the best dance companies. But again the rock solid evidence is missing. It is very difficult to believe the statement which does not provide with enough evidence. Had the author mentioned the alumni who are working for famous dance companies it would have been easy to believe the author.
Concluding, it can be stated a proper study of the argument is necessary to evaluate the PBS ranking.It may be possible that all the claims by the author are cent percent true. Or there is also chance that it may be partially true. But until a thorough study is done about school ranking, school teachers and graduated students, we cannot take the authors side with certainty.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, as for, as to, in particular, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 40.0 19.6327345309 204% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2365.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 485.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87628865979 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56652088242 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461855670103 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.9552187711 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5925925926 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.962962963 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.48148148148 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203297664039 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473138570477 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631653700384 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116493413047 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375228510784 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.