The author claim that the Pirouettes Ballet School is the most preferred choice among the ballet dance schools in whole Elmtownn due to its highly intensive program. The author further claims that teachers have performed in the most renowned ballet companies of the world and that the alumnus has become professional dancers with top dance companies. The claim seems straight forward and flawless but a little probing into the underlying assumptions shall help us determine the soundness of the argument.
The author mentions the programs' intensity to strengthen his argument but the mention remains underdeveloped until it answers various questions. How intensive is the program? What is the metric of comparison and intensity considered here? With how many schools have they compared their program to be qualified as most intensive? Do they just focus upon a single technique in the intensive program or do they spread it over multifarious styles? What is the student to teacher ratio in the school and does a teacher focuses to an acceptable extent upon a student? The author's claim regarding the intensity can only be supported if the above questions find a satisfactory answer.
The author claims that their teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. But the claim fails to determine or clear if the teachers of other schools haven't participated in those companies. It also fails to mention the number of teachers who have achieved this feat. It may be possible that only a handful of teachers are experienced to this level and others may be novice.
Moreover, it can be seen from the argument that many of this school's students have become professional dancers with top dance companies. However, it can easily be argued that the alumnus of other schools have also achieved this level of expertise. In the complete argument, there's no mention or comparison of the authenticity of the top dance companies which author claims. There could be non talked reasons which may not favor this school and those include teachers' and school's passion towards the teaching and students. It could be also be located in suburbs or difficult places which are not easily accessible. The school may have a substantially high fee.
Thus we see that there are number of scenarios which can easily weaken the author's claim toward the Pirouettes Ballet School being the clear choice for ballet among students. Unless all of the questions and alternate scenarios are clarified, the claims and the whole argument remains precarious.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 418 350
No. of Characters: 2110 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.522 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.048 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.607 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.985 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 352, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ional dancers with top dance companies. The claim seems straight forward and flawle...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rmine the soundness of the argument. The author mentions the programs intensi...
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Line 3, column 4, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ne the soundness of the argument. The author mentions the programs intensity ...
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Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'programs'' or 'program's'?
Suggestion: programs'; program's
...argument. The author mentions the programs intensity to strengthen his argument bu...
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Line 3, column 518, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'focus'?
Suggestion: focus
... ratio in the school and does a teacher focuses to an acceptable extent upon a student?...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uestions find a satisfactory answer. The author claims that their teachers ha...
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Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
... clear if the teachers of other schools havent participated in those companies. It als...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...this level and others may be novice. Moreover, it can be seen from the argume...
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Line 7, column 61, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... be seen from the argument that many of this schools students have become profession...
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Line 7, column 279, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...of expertise. In the complete argument, theres no mention or comparison of the authent...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ool may have a substantially high fee. Thus we see that there are number of s...
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Line 9, column 3, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...y have a substantially high fee. Thus we see that there are number of scenari...
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Line 9, column 185, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...hoice for ballet among students. Unless all of the questions and alternate scenarios are c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14868105516 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65837695001 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455635491607 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4514290592 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5909090909 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9545454545 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90909090909 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381827884367 0.218282227539 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119703466626 0.0743258471296 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113299995814 0.0701772020484 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225562781234 0.128457276422 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604624287286 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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