The purpose of higher education is to prepare students for the future, but Classen students are at a serious disadvantage in the competition for the post- college employment due to the University's burdensome requirements. Classen's Job placement rate is substantially lower than placement rates of many top-ranked schools. Classen students would be more attractive to employers if they had more time to take advanced courses in their speciality, rather than being required to spend fifteen percent of their time at Classen taking courses outside of their subject area. We demand, therefore, that the University abandon or drastically cut back on its breadth requirements.
The author contends that low placement rate of Classen students compared to other universities is: they have to spend fifteen percent of time at Classen taking courses outside their subject area and this burdensome breadth requirement is a serious disadvantage for the students. Author demands the university should cut back on its breadth requirements which would allow students to take advanced courses. While the argument may seem plausible at first glance, the scrutiny of the evidences reveals that the assumptions are unwarranted.
First and foremost, the author assumes that the students of the Classen University are equally capable as of other universities if provided with advanced courses. Although this could be true, it is no guaranteed that the students of the Classen have similar academic and other required qualifications as that demanded by the employers. The students of other top-ranked schools may bear better confidence level and aptitude required for the jobs than that of Classen's and on the ground of theirs inherit characteristics employer's are selecting other students.
Secondly, the author cites that the additional courses other than their subject area as burdensome, however, demands for the advanced courses. This assumption seems to be made without clear evidences: the advanced courses could also be the burdensome for the students. The advanced courses may eventually be more hectic and students could not cope with the demand of advanced courses. Furthermore, the courses that are currently offered to the students may be sufficient enough to meet their academic requirements and there is no need of the advanced courses at all.
Moreover, the author suggests that the students are taking the courses outside of their subject area but fails to state what those courses deals with. The courses although seem to be outside the related subject but may be required for the professional life. If the courses teach about the professional attributes, those required while acquiring the job and during the professional career, then instead of the courses being burdensome they prove to be important assets for the Classen students. In this scenario the students chance placement increases rather than get diminished as cited by the author.
The argument would be strengthened considerably if the author provides sufficient statistics to back the claim that Classen’s students have same level of aptitude as of other universities. Additionally, the author, should clearly indicates whether the advanced courses would be required for students and won't be burdensome for the students. Similarly, there must be clear evidence that the extra courses outside the area of study is hindering the students from their possible placement oppurtunities and offer no useful knowledge that could be helpful for the students in finding suitable jobs. Therefore, further investigations are required before cutting back the breadth requirements of the universities.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 460 350
No. of Characters: 2485 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.631 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.402 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.811 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 196 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 170 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 114 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.043 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.416 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.611 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 236, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'indicate'
Suggestion: indicate
...dditionally, the author, should clearly indicates whether the advanced courses would be r...
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Line 9, column 505, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m their possible placement oppurtunities and offer no useful knowledge that could...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2537.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 459.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52723311547 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89793108375 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435729847495 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 766.8 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.306540627 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.944444444 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209190975853 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850550515202 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567105268625 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151457591381 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503260135194 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.3799401198 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.5979740519 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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