The statement above explains how recently fishermen when on incusions by deep sea to find that Madagascan shrimp have significant reduction in the numer of population. Breeding season will soon arrive and the number of shrimp should multiply. However, the fisherman argues that the population will still not be as abundant as it should be. Since this trend is expected to continue for the next 7 years, the Madagascan shrimp will be an endangered species. The argument has many flaws and assumptions to convince the reader Madagascan shrimp will be endangered.
First, it is important to consider where the fishermen went to the incursions and how recent it was. It could be that where the fishermen went, there was not many Madagascan shrimp in the first place due to the time of the day or the year. Perhaps the majority of the Madagascan shrimp migrated to another part of the sea and only some of them were seen. Also, how recent was this exploration? It could have been one month or 3 months ago. During that time until now, things could have changed.
Next, the argument states theres a "significant" reduction of population but what does that mean? How much shrimp did we see before versus now? Besides the number in reduction of shrimp, it would be helpful to know how fast shrimp breed and how many breed per season. The argument would be stronger If we knew how much less and the breeding rate of Madagascan shrimp.
Lastly, the argument predicts that this trend will continue for the next seven years. This is a logical fallacy because we can't predict seven years from now based on a recent exploration. Perhaps if this has been a trend for more that 2 years, but even then predicting seven years from now is not a convincing prediction. A lot of things can change in a couple years and many in 7 years.
Lastly, this argument is not convincing and valid due to many assumptions and lack of information needed to make such conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The statement above explains how recently fishermen when on incusions by deep sea to find that Madagascan shrimp have significant reduction in the numer of population.
Error: numer Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: incusions Suggestion: inclusions
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here goes a sample:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-argument-task-essays/recent-incursions-…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 341 350
No. of Characters: 1570 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.297 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.604 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.473 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 66 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.861 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.543 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.143 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 7, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...can shrimp will be endangered. First, it is important to consider where the fi...
^^
Line 7, column 27, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...e changed. Next, the argument states theres a 'significant' reduction of ...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 34, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ed. Next, the argument states theres a 'significant' reduction of po...
^
Line 7, column 113, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...population but what does that mean? How much shrimp did we see before versus now? Be...
^^^^
Line 9, column 124, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...s. This is a logical fallacy because we cant predict seven years from now based on a...
^^^^
Line 9, column 372, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun in seems to be countable; consider using: 'many ins'.
Suggestion: many ins
...things can change in a couple years and many in 7 years. Lastly, this argument is no...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, lastly, so, still, then, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 341.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78299120235 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70227881271 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50146627566 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7702161675 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.55 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.05 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267792354729 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861387116399 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910925010085 0.0701772020484 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133965089346 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114395234237 0.0628817314937 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.3799401198 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.3550499002 147% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.197005988 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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