Recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Considerable evidence is required to show how the incursions by deep-sea fishermen led to the reduction in the population of Madagascan shrimp.The time when the incursions took place can be the same as the time when there is no breeding happening. Due to this, naturally there could be a decrease in the shrimp population.
The climatic conditions during the incursions can also play a role in determining the rise or fall in the number of shrimps. If the fishermen conducted the incursions during extreme cold or hot conditions, then the shrimps may find it difficult to sustain those temperatures and end in less breeding. So, the exact season of the incursions is also required to validate the change in the shrimp population.
During the breeding season, weather might be favourable and there can be increase in shrimp number. But there needs to be sufficient evidence to show that the fishermen do not arrive during this season. Otherwise the shrimp population gets plummeted significantly.
The argument also has a prediction that if the shrimp population returns to the levels before the fishing boats arrived, the fishing takes place in the same manner, thereby reducing the shrimp population and making them an endangered species. But, the same breed of shrimps can exist in another nearby habitat also. Then the shrimps can not be enlisted as endangered species. Sufficient evidence is needed to show the various locations of the existence of shrimps. Also, valid data must be provided to support the prediction that the trend of fishing and reduction in the shrimp number continue to be the same in the next several years. Because in the upcoming years, the fishermen might hunt for another breeds of shrimps and in other locations.
So, the given argument needs strong evidence to validate all the sentences in it.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 303 350
No. of Characters: 1495 1500
No. of Different Words: 139 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.172 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.934 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.685 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.001 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.598 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
... in the population of Madagascan shrimp.The time when the incursions took place can...
^^^
Line 5, column 204, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...ermen do not arrive during this season. Otherwise the shrimp population gets plummeted si...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 311, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...mps can exist in another nearby habitat also. Then the shrimps can not be enlisted a...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 302.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08940397351 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75885050071 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490066225166 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8556048497 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.466666667 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.86666666667 5.70786347227 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264306858207 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958962130002 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596236644444 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145566034409 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0827396228499 0.0628817314937 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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