A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The author's arguments and conclusions on the tooth cavity of people of different region lacks many evidences. The decaying of tooth of people of different regions depend on several factors like food habits, water and the environmental factors. The author is not stating about any of the external factors and without these factors the conclusions are stated. Such conclusions cannot be accepted. There are several loop holes that are be definitely addressed before concluding the facts.
Firstly, the author is stating that the children from Himalayan region suffer less from tooth decay than the suburban children of America. Here several factors has to be considered. Factors like the children's diet habits, their routines are to be considered. The diet routines of the people are totally different from region to region. Without this information, it would be difficult to state that the Himalayan children has less tooth decay than suburban American children. It may also be likely that suburban American children follow the food habits of having food refreshments such as edible gums, that may be causing them to have the tooth decay. Even though this is a guess, this even cannot make one agree to the conclusion stated by the author.
Furthermore, the author is also stating that the Himalayan mountain region, Nepal people have little or no professional dental care while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. This statements also lacks proper evidence to approve the conclusion. Here also many factors such as the routines of the Himalayan people have to be considered. It may be likely, that Nepal people follow a routine of brushing their teeth twice daily and hence their tooth condition is good in a way that requires little or no visit to a dentist. The routines adopted by the people are different from region to region. Hence, without this factors corroborated, the conclusions seem futile to accept.
Thus, in total, in total, the author's statements lacks several factors that makes the argument facile. Still greater and deeper study has to be made to conclude the facts.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 353 350
No. of Characters: 1758 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.335 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.98 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.481 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.65 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.61 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.45 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.487 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 245, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s, water and the environmental factors. The author is not stating about any of the ...
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Line 1, column 434, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
.... There are several loop holes that are be definitely addressed before concluding ...
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Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...tist an average of 1.25 times per year. This statements also lacks proper evidence t...
^^^^
Line 5, column 667, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...t from region to region. Hence, without this factors corroborated, the conclusions s...
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Line 7, column 104, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...factors that makes the argument facile. Still greater and deeper study has to be made...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, still, thus, while, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 353.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10198300283 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56052417613 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456090651558 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7649453051 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.05 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.65 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263769025553 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827352852451 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886040142261 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145099612838 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0955039713506 0.0628817314937 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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