A recent study shows that people living on the continent of North America suffer 9 times more chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of Asia. Interestingly, Asians, on average, eat 20 grams of soy per day, whereas North Americans eat virtually none. It turns out that soy contains phytochemicals called Isoflavones, which have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Thus, North Americans should consider eating soy on a regular basis as a way of preventing fatigue and depression.
The author of the argument has cited that people living on North America suffer 9 times more chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of Asia, soy consumption must be the reason behind it. The argument might appear logical and convincing at first glance. However, a more critical analysis of the justification supplied by the author highlighted many queries. Therefore, the premises in their current form are not cogent and the argument is prevalent with unwarranted assumptions that are susceptible for attacks.
First and foremost, there may be plethora of complicated reasons behind chronic depression like over thinking, not sufficient sleep and excessive work pressure, moreover physical and mental fitness is also crucial to avoid depression. Hence, soy consumption cannot be the only reason behind this chronic depression. For instance, my friend Roy was healthy and had no symptoms of depression, after few days his grandfather passed away, he did not speak to any one for months and due to the accumulation of negative emotions, he went into depression.
Secondly, soy may contain isoflavone, that can help in preventing diseases. However, author has ignored that diseases can also be genetic or hereditary, if fatigue is genetic in North Americans, then there won't be any significant effect even after consuming soy daily.
Thirdly, dietary plan of North Americans is not presented, there may be other food items that North American consume that have similar effect as soy. For example, North Americans frequently consume ginger that has antibodies that can prevent disease. Moreover, they consume meat and green vegetables which can help in curbing fatigue.
Lastly, Argument is not cogent about the age group of people that are suffering from chronic fatigue. If Americans have developed fatigue only for a selected age group like late twenties, there may be other reasons like people eat less due to heavy work load and they don't have sufficient time to spend with their loved ones could be the cause for depression
To sum up, the authors assumptions are based on unsubstantiated presumptions. The author should have reinforced his argument with auxiliary evidence to make the case more convincing. Therefore, writer failed to address these issues that chronic depression is a complicated condition, consumption of soy cannot be the sole reason for curbing it, the dietary plan of Americans is not mentioned and which age group is significantly affected by fatigue and depression is not cogent. Hence, leaving argument indefensible.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 40 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 2140 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.169 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.712 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.565 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...father passed away, he did not speak to any one for months and due to the accumulation ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...effect even after consuming soy daily. Thirdly, dietary plan of North Americans...
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Line 9, column 269, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...at less due to heavy work load and they dont have sufficient time to spend with thei...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ones could be the cause for depression To sum up, the authors assumptions are b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, for example, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 412.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34708737864 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80838878255 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531553398058 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 689.4 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.4142359066 57.8364921388 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.588235294 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2352941176 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64705882353 5.70786347227 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246793494313 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756868102618 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141945695457 0.0701772020484 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127502755431 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128032496383 0.0628817314937 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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