"Recently, butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. This change, however, has had little impact on our customers. In fact, only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine."
the argument is about the use of margarine instead of butter and the author claimed that customers do not complain and may not distinguish between margarine and butter. The argument is based on unwarranted assumptions and flawed for the following reasons
Primarily, the author told that only two percent of people complain and that means ninety out of a hundred people are satisfied with the change. The author baffled between the total number with a percentage. In might possible that more than a hundred people complain in the actual number. Also, there is a backslash in their customer since the change. So only two percent of people launch their complain does not mean people are satisfied with the change. They might not complain because of varied reasons. it might possible that there is no proper feedback counter or the restaurant does not take feedback seriously. The author does not provide the method used in surveying the customers. It might possible that only trifle part of customers took the part in the survey.
Furthermore, the author claims that many customers do not complain when they got, margarine instead of butter. The people may not complain because they might be the first time customers and they were not informed about the change. It might possible that the server straight servers them margarine and does not tell them about the change. Some customers might not complain because they thought butter might not available.
The author also claims that customers may not able to distinguish between butter and margarine. The author does not provide any information about how many products that serve with margarine. It might be possible that their best selling products were without butter and since the butter change with margarine actually does not affect the people and some people who ate the margarine products complain about them.
The mentioned argument is based on unwarranted assumptions and unfeasible reasons. The argument is flawed and failed to provide any convincing data that proves that the change of margarine is positive.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: They might not complain because of varied reasons. it might possible that there is no proper feedback counter or the restaurant does not take feedback seriously.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to might and possible
Sentence: It might possible that only trifle part of customers took the part in the survey.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to might and possible
Sentence: It might possible that the server straight servers them margarine and does not tell them about the change.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to might and possible
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1702 1500
No. of Different Words: 128 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.05 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.394 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.722 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.061 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.389 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.386 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
the argument is about the use of margarine ...
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Line 2, column 508, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...not complain because of varied reasons. it might possible that there is no proper ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 337.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14243323442 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46353358042 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.385756676558 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 519.3 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.9707320742 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2105263158 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7368421053 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73684210526 5.70786347227 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142101706657 0.218282227539 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523226435712 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382150563093 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878440503944 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348194476217 0.0628817314937 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.32208582834 83% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 98.500998004 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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