A recently issued twenty year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin a medicine used to treat headaches

In this statement, the predictor claims that residents will suffer fewer headaches in the future due to a raise of seemingly useful medicine called Salicylates. However, before we reach a final decision about whether or not this conclusion is reasonable, we first need to consider several questions, and the answer to these questions would help us to better assess this prediction.

To begin with, one question which needs to be addressed is whether the two medicine belonging to the same chemical family have the same or similar therapeutic effect to a particular disease. To be more specific, from a chemical perspective, a very little nuance between two compounds can lead to a significant difference. It is possible that salicylates do not have a positive therapeutic effect on headaches, and even hurt people. Without ruling out these possibilities, the prediction cannot be cogent at all.

Moreover, in order to fully evaluate this prediction, we would also need to be informed about the answer to the question that is there a causal relationship between the rise of commercial use of salicylates and the steady decline in the average number of headaches. It is perfectly reasonable that with the development of economy and technology, residents of Menia gradually pay more attention to physical health and live a better lifestyle. And the possibility of suffering headaches for a person is getting decreased since his overall physical condition becomes better and better. If this is the case, it would undermine the author’s statement and render the prediction much less persuasive.
Finally, to support the claim of increasing salicylates supply, the author mentions that more companies are planning to add salicylates to food as flavor. However, another question that needs to be answered is whether there are some underneath aspects of using salicylates as a flavor additive, which may reduce the prospective profits, and these companies do not take them into consideration before. For example, it is possible that residents of Menia may dislike the food with salicylates because of its special taste. In addition, perhaps the producing procedure has a very difficult step, and it cannot be addressed now due to the limit of technology. Each of the scenarios, if true, would undermine the author’s statement.

To sum up, the prediction in the reading material relies on doubtful information that salicylates can cure headaches, that the rise of commercial use of salicylates responsible for the decline in the average number of reported headaches, that salicylates as flavor additive can finally come true and acceptable by local citizens. Only the aforementioned questions are adequately addressed can we effectively evaluate the prediction and reach a logical conclusion.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... before we reach a final decision about whether or not this conclusion is reasonable, we first...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, for example, in addition, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2360.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 440.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36363636364 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05512710912 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522727272727 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.3604501383 57.8364921388 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.823529412 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8823529412 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210340934216 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645714153249 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597592755653 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113189075477 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027321609542 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.3799401198 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 48.3550499002 60% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 98.500998004 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 440 350
No. of Characters: 2297 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.58 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.22 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.946 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 183 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 145 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 113 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 82 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.882 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.792 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.485 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5