"Recently we signed a contract with The Fly-Away Pest-Control Company to provide pest-control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest-Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff Company for all our pest-control services."
The vice president of the food company has decided to oust the Fly-Away Pest-Control company and sign a contract with Buzzoffcompany: he/she evidents that the prior company is providing its services at low cost as compared to that of later, however, it could not control the pest damage to a satisfiable degree. The vice president rushes to this decision only by comparing the the damages in two of his ware houses which is totally unconcinencing and full of loopholes.
The vice president fails to give information about the size of two ware houses. May be the ware house taken care by the Fly-Away Pest-control Compani is significantly larger and holds more products than that by the other ware house. If this is the case then, the proportionate damage of the damage could be equal of even less than that of ware house at Wintervale indicating the performance of Fly-Away Pest-control Company much better than of other.
Further, it is not clear about the location two ware houses. May be the place where the ware house of Palm city is located is more prone to the rats and other pest because it is in bushy area or near a jungle or paddy field while the other is in less prone area. Not only this, vice president donot give any information about the kind of fast-food they store at two ware house. The ware house in the Palm city may be storing relatively more perishable food products as compared to those stored at the ware house in Wintervale. This might be the reason for more pest damage recorded at the one at Palm city.
Additionally. it is nowhere mentioned about the pest control measure used by two companies because the Fly-Away might have used environmeltal friendly control measures to control pest while the Buzzoff might have used highly poisionus chemicals to control pese, which might have noxious effects in human health as well when foods contaminated with such chemicals are eaten. In such case, the Fly-Away company is much better because it is more conscious about the health of people and thus help to preserve the good reputation of the fast-food company in long term.
In conclusion, the vice president seems to lack a good judgement and a delail survey for finding the proportionate pest damage to make a judicious decision. The president must have studied the vulnerability of the ware houses, perishability of the food stored in two houses and measures used by two companies before making decision against the Fly-away company.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nconcinencing and full of loopholes. The vice president fails to give informatio...
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...ind of fast-food they store at two ware house. The ware house in the Palm city may be...
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'in conclusion', 'kind of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.282511210762 0.25644967241 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.136771300448 0.15541462614 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0919282511211 0.0836205057962 110% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0582959641256 0.0520304965353 112% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0179372197309 0.0272364105082 66% => OK
Prepositions: 0.136771300448 0.125424944231 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0493273542601 0.0416121511921 119% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.68408971475 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0269058295964 0.026700313972 101% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.127802690583 0.113004496875 113% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0179372197309 0.0255425247493 70% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00896860986547 0.0127820249294 70% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2467.0 2731.13054187 90% => OK
No of words: 421.0 446.07635468 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85985748219 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.308788598575 0.378187486979 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.239904988124 0.287650121315 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.163895486936 0.208842608468 78% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.106888361045 0.135150697306 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68408971475 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 207.018472906 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439429928741 0.469332199767 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.3623334631 52.1807786196 91% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.039408867 75% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0666666667 23.2022227129 121% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.4346839952 57.7814097925 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.466666667 141.986410481 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0666666667 23.2022227129 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.724660767414 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.58251231527 223% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 52.057165479 51.9672348444 100% => OK
Elegance: 2.2 1.8405768891 120% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310356611961 0.441005458295 70% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.154568450657 0.135418324435 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.10014212847 0.0829849096947 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.630927267909 0.58762219726 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.204309962475 0.147661913831 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144787819529 0.193483328276 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812731271599 0.0970749176394 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.481867967153 0.42659136922 113% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0897034029388 0.0774707102158 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234981704256 0.312017818177 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428734203024 0.0698173142475 61% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.33743842365 36% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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