In the reading, the author asserts that the new use of salicylates could contribute to the reduce of headaches among citizens of Mentia. This claim is based on several assumption which, if is not true, could make the conclusion an unwarranted one.
Firstly, the author assumes the salicylates could reduce the headache since salicylates is from the same chemical family as aspirin, which is used to treat the headaches. However, there is no guarantee that the drugs in the same chemical family could have similar effects. If this assumption was false, this flaw could topple all the following conclusion based on the effect of the salicylates to relief the headache, ruining the whole study.
Moreover, the finding of food-processing companies that the salicylates could be used as the flavor additives, asserted by the author, is one reason that the salicylates would reduce the headaches number in the Mentia. Nevertheless, this reason assume that a great number of the citizen would be the food produced by that food-processing company or the food processed by the technology which would add the salicylates as the flavor additives. Only in this way, in the condition that the salicylates could truly relief the headache, can the rate of headaches in the Mentia decrease. However, if the product containing the salicylates do not sell well in the Mentia, it can not make any help to reduce the local's headaches.
Finally, the author assume that by the new use of the salicylates, the rate of headaches would steady decrease. The conclusion is based on the salicylates's curing effects to the headaches. However, if the salicylates can not prevent the headaches, the rate of headaches among citizen would continue to rise. Additionally, the cause of headaches can hardly be monotony. Different factors such as the environment, the mental pressure, the diet would also cause headaches. Therefore we shall not assume the new use of the salicylates could contribute to the steady decline of headaches suffered by the citizens of Mentia.
To wrap it up, the author draws a conclusion based on several unwarranted assumptions. In order to enhance the reliability of the conclusion, the author need to provide more convincing proof of the curing effect of salicylates on the headaches, the real intake of food containing the salicylates by the average citizen of Mentia as well as the evidence that the salicylates could forestall the headaches.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 398 350
No. of Characters: 1998 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.467 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.02 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.843 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.412 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.071 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.424 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... use of salicylates could contribute to the reduce of headaches among citizens of Mentia. ...
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Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...izens of Mentia. This claim is based on several assumption which, if is not true, could make the c...
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Line 7, column 471, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...e, the diet would also cause headaches. Therefore we shall not assume the new use of the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16331658291 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94376410011 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.396984924623 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 662.4 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7356234052 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.882352941 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4117647059 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273514508197 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0943514662182 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804939149175 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161141624361 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686094804343 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.