TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

In the modern age, the advanced technology offers great convenience to the public and it is no wonder that some teenagers hold the view that under the help of modern technology, young man do not need to practise the planning ability as they used to do. In the Contrast, from my perspective, I hold the counterargument that the ability to plan and organize is essential to an individual in the modern society.

To begin with, it is a common situation that opportunities are prepared for those people who have the detailed plan. Since without preparation, one can hardly get the chance in their career due to many factors such as fierce competition. To illustrate that idea, I would like to use the example of my cousin. My cousin like to make a detailed plan for every thing in his life,from his career plan to one night spent with his families. It is always exhausting to hang out with him since no one want to follow a plan in every minute when they are relaxing. However, this habit of my cousin helped him to get the chance to study aboard in Germany with full scholarship offered by his university. It is obvious that there could be plenty of people who want this chance, but my cousin made a investigation of the whole project, and read all the papers of the professor who came to his university as the representative of the Germany university. They had a pleasant talk which left the professor a good impression.Finally my cousin got that chance. In this case, we can say that the planning ability is critical to a individual in the modern society.

Another reason to endorse my position is that the one capable of giving a detained and good at organizing would be popular in his social circle. This reason lies in the fact that it is human nature to left messy work to others like planning. While they left those work to you, they pay their trust, which is important in enlarging and maintaining one's social circle. One of my former classmates, for instance, was very popular among the classmates. Everyone like to make friends with him since he could always make a satisfying party plan. Consequently, the claim that the organizing ability is important in the modern life is more reasonable.

Even if we take a step backward, says it is not important to make plan in the modern life. Many people hold this opinion because there always can be something to help you, such as application in your smartphone. However, it is based on an unwarranted prerequisite, since those designers of solutions, such as the developers of application, would like to drain profits from their users. For example, the travel agency in China would always want to guide their customers to those attractions having expensive tickets. By doing that, they could get kickback. In contrast, if you could plan the whole travel by yourself, you can save much money. Therefore, I still believe the importance of the ability to make plans.

To wrap things up, at the first glance, it could be hard to distinguish that, especially when it is taken into consideration under the complicated situations in the real world. However, after deliberation, I insists that the ability to make plans is important for the young in this era.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ho want this chance, but my cousin made a investigation of the whole project, and...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Finally
...ch left the professor a good impression.Finally my cousin got that chance. In this case...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...ch left the professor a good impression.Finally my cousin got that chance. In this case...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hat the planning ability is critical to a individual in the modern society. An...
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Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'insist'
Suggestion: insist
...l world. However, after deliberation, I insists that the ability to make plans is impor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 93.0 52.1666666667 178% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2658.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 559.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75491949911 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86242540663 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78352019527 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468694096601 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 850.5 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6609232964 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.230769231 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34615384615 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207151694204 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598591761368 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051002487291 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121160020925 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376735577359 0.0645574589148 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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