The argument quotes the memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham college. At the first glance, the argument seems pretty convincing and doesn't look flawed. The deeper readings of the argument shows that the argument consists of numerous flaws.
It is mentioned that the enrollment at Buckingham college is growing and based on these current trends, assumptions are made that over the next 50 years, this enrollment will double. Deciding the enrollments over the next 50 years is a huge statistics to keep in mind before deciding on it based on the current situation. If the argument had provided some evidence that the college has reached a higher ranking and is amongst the popular colleges in the country, the reason for the enrollment increase can be justified. Usually, a college's rank keeps fluctuating which might be reflected in the number of enrollments. Hence, to increase the dormitory space based on the statistics provided by he current trends and predicting the future is not a good idea.
It is said that the off-campus housing is difficult to afford considering the fact that the rents for the apartment in the town are high. To overcome these difficulties and to be student-friendly, the argument suggests off-campus housing. The evidence which would strengthen the argument would be the rental prices of the apartment and the financial conditions of the students studying at Buckingham college. What if most of the students studying at Buckingham college are day scholars? If this holds true, despite the increase in enrollments, the number of students using the dormitories declines. A statistics determining what percentage of the enrollments constitute day scholars would be helpful.
Last but not the least, there is a slight hint explicitly suggesting that 'attractive dormitories' might be the reason for increase in enrollments. This weakens the argument because it implies that the students who are choosing Buckingham college are focusing on their stay rather than the quality of education provided. Also, another issue can be if the number of dormitories increase and the students living in dormitories decrease, the rental cost per student might turn out more expensive than the off-campus housing because an increase in dormitories means more housing staff and so on.
Hence, if the argument makes use of more stronger evidence, the loopholes in the argument won't exist.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK. In GRE, we accept all data or evidence are true. It is important to find out loopholes behind surveys or studies. for example, in this topic, it said: '...will double over the next 50 years...', we agree with the statement, but what if the main students are from locals who like to live with their parents, or students who like to live off-campus.
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1994 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.126 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.82 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.611 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.294 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.569 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...he argument seems pretty convincing and doesnt look flawed. The deeper readings of the...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 530, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a college' or simply 'colleges'?
Suggestion: a college; colleges
...ent increase can be justified. Usually, a colleges rank keeps fluctuating which might be r...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 63, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to consider'.
Suggestion: to consider
...f-campus housing is difficult to afford considering the fact that the rents for the apartme...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 37, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
... Hence, if the argument makes use of more stronger evidence, the loopholes in the argument...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 387.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27131782946 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87888232891 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475452196382 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9844079501 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.333333333 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.38888888889 5.70786347227 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218661882935 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711625716363 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797175008826 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111954687945 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915569916104 0.0628817314937 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.