The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”
The arguments is about a environmental protection group which makes deprecating remark on the smith corporation of building a hotel on the land which is now the part of the Youngtown wildlife preserve which is home to a nearly 300 birds. The wildlife preserve further says that although the smith corporation is demanding only a small area for hotel it would degenerate the wildlife nearby to a great extent despite of they had promised to preserve the wildlife sanctuary. They say that this plan will not benefit them a single percent because their tourist attraction are this bird population, but coming to this conclusion that after the hotel, tourist attraction would be less and bird population would be less is a flawed one.
The First flaw in this argument is to come to an conclusion that the bird population in that area will get decrease after the estahblishment of the hotel and it would affect the bird population and disturb the wildlife sanctuary.The environmental protection group can't just say that the hotel would have a negative impact, they have to first give a basis of their statement, that on what basis, on what facts they are giving this statement that it would definitely have an impact on the wildlife sanctuary. It might happen that after estahblishment of hotel, the wildlife preserves would be benefited in some way or other.
The second flaw that, it is vague statement to give that it would have disastrous consequences on that area, the environmental group are just making allegations without any proof, not giving the chance to hotel to explain their point of view.It might be possible that the Smith corporation would have a planned strategy which would be benefited to both. So the environmentalist group first listen to the Smith corporation, what they have to say and what they had planned because they had ensured that the hotel would not have any negative effect, so they must had a plan or they would have thought something better so as to not affect the wildlife sanctuary.
The conclusion is so extreme because the environmentalist group says that there is no circumstances which will benefit their community, the opposite would also might happen that after the estahblishment of the hotel, more tourist get attracted towards the wildlife sanctuary and at the same time bird population would also not get affected. So by thinking this way both smith corporation and Youngtown wildlife preserve would get benefited and overall it would give a positive outcome.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 2059 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.902 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.768 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.817 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.463 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.643 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
The arguments is about a environmental protection group ...
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Line 1, column 24, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
The arguments is about a environmental protection group which ma...
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Line 3, column 47, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...rst flaw in this argument is to come to an conclusion that the bird population in ...
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Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...tion and disturb the wildlife sanctuary.The environmental protection group cant jus...
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Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...uary.The environmental protection group cant just say that the hotel would have a ne...
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Line 5, column 243, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...to hotel to explain their point of view.It might be possible that the Smith corpor...
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Line 5, column 616, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...hey would have thought something better so as to not affect the wildlife sanctuary. ...
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Line 7, column 75, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no circumstances'?
Suggestion: there are no circumstances
...se the environmentalist group says that there is no circumstances which will benefit their community, the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, as to, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 418.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01196172249 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83045899709 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.387559808612 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 46.0 22.8473053892 201% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 110.903361336 57.8364921388 192% => OK
Chars per sentence: 232.777777778 119.503703932 195% => OK
Words per sentence: 46.4444444444 23.324526521 199% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165685392833 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931458218215 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527157713206 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121175128824 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0804406431618 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.4 14.3799401198 177% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.25 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 12.197005988 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.67 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.4 11.1389221557 183% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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