Some studies conducted by Bronston College, which is also located in a small town, reveal that both male and female professors are happier living in small towns when their spouses are also employed in the same geographic area. Therefore, in the interest of attracting the most gifted teachers and researchers to our faculty and improving the morale of our entire staff, we at Pierce University should offer employment to the spouse of each new faculty member we hire. Although we cannot expect all offers to be accepted or to be viewed as an ideal job offer, the money invested in this effort will clearly be well spent because, if their spouses have a chance of employment, new professors will be more likely to accept our offers
In this argument author claims that , to improve morale of entire staff if their spouses have chance of employment ,new professors will be more likely to accept our offer ,to support that argument author gives example of boron college where both male and female are happier living in town when their spouses work at the same place.but this argument is dubious in many ways.
first of all, the author states that in bronston college ,which is also located in small town, reveal that both male and female professor are happier living in small towns when their spouses are also employed in the same geographic area ,by this author tries to compare bronston college with pierce university. but in my point of view author can not compare both university without the proper analysis, there may be case that the people live in that town have different perception of living than in this town. So this is problematic statement, author need to provide more data .
secondly , the author did not provide the details about the geograpical environment and surrounding area of the towns, it may be possible that the atmosphere around the town which bronston college located at is very happily living that’s why male or female at that place are happy.author needs to collect those information.
thirdly, author mentions that this idea is for the interest of attracting the most gifted teachers and researchers to our faculty ,but author has no guarantee if this idea is going to succeed or not, in may opinion the highly knowledgeable teacher and researchers wants to be professor at big towns ,and other scenario is what if the male or female professor has no spouse?so this statement is less valuable.
fourthly, the author is assuming that money invested in this effort will clearly be well spent, but author should not make this big decision without having proper evidence that the rule applied in bronston college will be profitable to the pierce university.
in sum,author has not provided any clear states too agree his argument, he needs to provide clear evidence to strengthen his argument that bronston college rule will be suited to pierce university.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 361 350
No. of Characters: 1753 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.359 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.856 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.422 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 45.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.83 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.443 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.815 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
In this argument author claims that , to improve morale of entire staff if th...
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Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... their spouses have chance of employment ,new professors will be more likely to ac...
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Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... will be more likely to accept our offer ,to support that argument author gives ex...
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Line 1, column 300, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le are happier living in town when their spouses work at the same place.but this ...
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Line 3, column 2, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...s argument is dubious in many ways. first of all, the author states that in brons...
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Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
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...e author states that in bronston college ,which is also located in small town, rev...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...lso employed in the same geographic area ,by this author tries to compare bronston...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ronston college with pierce university. but in my point of view author can not com...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ston college with pierce university. but in my point of view author can not compa...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... university without the proper analysis, there may be case that the people live i...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...tement, author need to provide more data . secondly , the author did not provide...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...t, author need to provide more data . secondly , the author did not provide the detail...
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Line 4, column 10, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...r need to provide more data . secondly , the author did not provide the details ...
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Line 4, column 307, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
...place are happy.author needs to collect those information. thirdly, author mentions that this...
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Line 5, column 3, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thirdly
... needs to collect those information. thirdly, author mentions that this idea is for...
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Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mation. thirdly, author mentions that this idea is for the interest of attract...
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Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... teachers and researchers to our faculty ,but author has no guarantee if this idea...
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Line 5, column 302, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...chers wants to be professor at big towns ,and other scenario is what if the male o...
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Suggestion: Fourthly
...e?so this statement is less valuable. fourthly, the author is assuming that money inve...
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Line 6, column 238, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... bronston college will be profitable to the pierce university. in sum,author has not pro...
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Suggestion: In
... profitable to the pierce university. in sum,author has not provided any clear s...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , author
...table to the pierce university. in sum,author has not provided any clear states too a...
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Line 7, column 50, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to agree'?
Suggestion: to agree
...uthor has not provided any clear states too agree his argument, he needs to provide clear...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 359.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03064066852 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50358096453 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509749303621 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 44.0 22.8473053892 193% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.618214494 57.8364921388 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 225.75 119.503703932 189% => OK
Words per sentence: 44.875 23.324526521 192% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.125 5.70786347227 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.25449101796 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336602034477 0.218282227539 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165462461896 0.0743258471296 223% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.187294307453 0.0701772020484 267% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171525843761 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145683359878 0.0628817314937 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.7 14.3799401198 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.82 48.3550499002 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.5 12.197005988 168% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 25.5 12.3882235529 206% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 19.6 11.1389221557 176% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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