SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's current headquarters. Moreover, Middleburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
The argument relies on several broad asumptions about the towns of Middesburgh and Corporateville. These asumptions would need to be elaborated on in order to prove the argument.
It's stated that there is a "surge" in homes being bought in Corporateville making it more ideal place to live. There are no numbers givein to validate this statment. Corporateville might have had 50 residents and gained another 50, while Middlesburgh could have had 1000 residence and gained another 50. Due to the relativity of the numbers, it could be more noticible for people to be moving to Corporateville even though the same amount of people moved to Middlesburgh as well. To strengthen the arguemnt there would need to be concreet numbers provided about how many people exactly are moving to Corporateville in comparison to Middlesburgh.
Even if that inforamtion was provided, there's still a lack in proof of wiether or not the employees would enjoy living there. While the argument claims that the SuperCorp employees perfer a non urban area, there is no definition of what "urban area" means. To stregthen the argument it would have to be stated what exactly the employees do not like, that would be absent for them in Corproteville. For example if the employees where frustrated with high volume traffic hours, it could be explained that Corporateville has less cars on the road making the comute to and from work easier.
The last point in the argument explains that Corporateville has lower taxes making the cost of living cheeper. This again is a flawed asumption. while the taxes may be lower then Middlesburgh, there is nothing comparing the other costs of living in Corporateville. Middlesbrurgh may have had cheep house prices while Corporateville has exorbatant prices. This would mean that once the employees moved to Corporateville they would have a large morgauge to pay off every month. So while they are paying less in taxes, they are now paying more overall.
In conclusion, the argument is making serval conections with failed logic. The arument would need to be strengthened with more specificity in order to have any validity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 26, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... argument. Its stated that there is a 'surge' in homes being bought...
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Line 5, column 40, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
... Even if that inforamtion was provided, theres still a lack in proof of wiether or not...
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Line 5, column 533, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun cars is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ld be explained that Corporateville has less cars on the road making the comute to a...
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Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...eper. This again is a flawed asumption. while the taxes may be lower then Middlesburg...
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Line 7, column 169, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lower than'?
Suggestion: lower than
...lawed asumption. while the taxes may be lower then Middlesburgh, there is nothing comparin...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 175, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...asumption. while the taxes may be lower then Middlesburgh, there is nothing comparin...
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Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'cheeped'.
Suggestion: cheeped
...porateville. Middlesbrurgh may have had cheep house prices while Corporateville has e...
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Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'cheeped'.
Suggestion: cheeped
...porateville. Middlesbrurgh may have had cheep house prices while Corporateville has e...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, still, then, well, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 352.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15909090909 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06994898604 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511363636364 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6057440083 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5789473684 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5263157895 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162475438443 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523699812743 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598960683626 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0774981172993 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613449902773 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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