SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's current headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
SuperCorp had their headquarters in Middlesburg, which is a predominately urban area. People living in cities are always running around the clock, bound to it. Their lives are tied to a strict schedule, not having a single minute to spare from it. From the one moment they wake to the time they sleep, everything is planned and precise. While this was once preferred by the working class, the employee survey conducted by the SuperCorp contradicts it now. The result shows that people are now more inclined to stay in semi-urban areas, where they get to enjoy both the city as well as the country aspects.
No longer having to remain in the tight loop of time, people get to breathe in fresh air in the suburban areas. Taking the survey into consideration, SuperCorp decided to move its headquarters from Middlesburg to Corporateville, which has shown an increase in the number of homeowners in Corporateville. Not only is this a suburban area, it also has lower tax rates which makes the place more friendly for the working people. Reduced taxes, free time in their hands, and clean air to breathe in, it is no surprise that people are shifting their base to Corporteville
The decision to shift the headquarters to Corporateville is a smart one, because not only is this place cheaper, but also a safe haven, where people are more than willing to work for the success of the company and spending their time and energy to it. The business will also flourish as the rules are flexible, giving them good opportunities for the economic growth. It's safe to say that the decisions made by considering the survey response from the employees would seldom go wrong.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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flaws:
Need to argue against the prompts, not support. This is not an issue essay.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: ? Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 286 350
No. of Characters: 1343 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.112 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.696 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.662 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 84 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 56 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 40 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.403 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.385 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.492 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
SuperCorp had their headquarters in Midd...
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Line 1, column 580, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
..., where they get to enjoy both the city as well as the country aspects. No longer...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ity as well as the country aspects. No longer having to remain in the tight ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...shifting their base to Corporteville The decision to shift the headquarters t...
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Line 5, column 129, Rule ID: SAFE_HAVEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'haven'.
Suggestion: haven
... only is this place cheaper, but also a safe haven, where people are more than willing to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.9520958084 15% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 16.3942115768 6% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1379.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 286.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82167832168 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72698806117 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566433566434 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 705.55239521 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.4899731066 57.8364921388 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.916666667 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16456919305 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591986388433 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728473983761 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106990442427 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167937409778 0.0628817314937 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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