"Ten years ago, as part of a comprehensive urban renewal program, the city of Transopolis adapted for industrial use a large area of severely substandard housing near the freeway. Subsequently, several factories were constructed there, crime rates in the area declined, and property tax revenues for the entire city increased. To further revitalize the city, we should now take similar action in a declining residential area on the opposite side of the city. Since some houses and apartments in existing nearby neighborhoods are currently unoccupied, alternate housing for those displaced by this action will be readily available."
The planning department of the city claims that we should use area, where are currently unoccupied, for establishing industries. To justify this recommendation, the author cites that the following facts. (1) Establishing several factories in Transopolis affect the rate of crimes positively. (2) Building industries in Transopolis were beneficial because of increasing tax revenues. (3) We can use the area, where have some unoccupied house, for building factories. Scrutiny each of these facts, however, reveal that none of them lend credible supports to the recommendation.
First, base on the fact that building factories were successful in the Transopolis, the author infers that factories can be functional. However, it is not necessarily the case. it is entirely possible that Transopolis have special facilities that anther city has not them. Indeed, Transopolis have many large unemployment juveniles that can work in the factory, while the scenario can be different in another city. In addition, the factories can increase the tax revenue, but the author does not mention that their pollution can be very high. In this way, the local government should allocate more budget to alleviate the environmental issue. Without considering this possible scenario, the author cannot justifiably conclude that building factories are beneficial for cities.
Second, the author relies on the assumption that establishing factories in Transopolis decrease the rate of crimes. However, it is quite possible that declining crimes in Transopolis were due to other factors. In fact, it is possible a great large of people move from the city after building factories, so the rate of crimes was decreased. Although common sense informs me that this relationship exists, the author must provide clear evidence of cause-and-effect relationships in this matter.
In the third place, the author assumes that we can use the area in the city that there are some housing and department, which are unoccupied. It is possible soon the demand for house increased because of the increasing the population. Hence, these house and department are not unoccupied for a long time. In short, since the argument relies on the limited information, I cannot take the author final conclusion seriously.
In sum up, the argument is flawed logically and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the recommendation, the author should provide the more information about cities facilities. In order to evaluate better the arguments, it would be better to know about all effective factors on decreasing crimes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'while', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'in short', 'in the third place']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.241758241758 0.25644967241 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.145054945055 0.15541462614 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0901098901099 0.0836205057962 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0461538461538 0.0520304965353 89% => OK
Pronouns: 0.032967032967 0.0272364105082 121% => OK
Prepositions: 0.134065934066 0.125424944231 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0307692307692 0.0416121511921 74% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.06845950764 2.79052419416 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0153846153846 0.026700313972 58% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.120879120879 0.113004496875 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0307692307692 0.0255425247493 120% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00879120879121 0.0127820249294 69% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2588.0 2731.13054187 95% => OK
No of words: 400.0 446.07635468 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.47 6.12365571057 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.4175 0.378187486979 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.3175 0.287650121315 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.26 0.208842608468 124% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.1825 0.135150697306 135% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06845950764 2.79052419416 110% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 207.018472906 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.469332199767 111% => OK
Word variations: 57.8395627064 52.1807786196 111% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.039408867 120% => OK
Sentence length: 16.6666666667 23.2022227129 72% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.804332154 57.7814097925 46% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.833333333 141.986410481 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 23.2022227129 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.724660767414 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 48.4166666667 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.8137254902 1.8405768891 99% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388358568555 0.441005458295 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.100990349729 0.135418324435 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0593931104678 0.0829849096947 72% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.532518694429 0.58762219726 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133802759585 0.147661913831 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163208305659 0.193483328276 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079985067767 0.0970749176394 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.433352565041 0.42659136922 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0394783913571 0.0774707102158 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28122680527 0.312017818177 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704821168937 0.0698173142475 101% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.82512315271 187% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 6.46551724138 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 14.657635468 136% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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