The excerpt avers that the disappearance of western gazelle is caused by the larger number of predators in the eastern preserve. Several arguments are presented for supporting the assertion but on close analysis one can find that arguments lack evidence.
To begin with, it is mentioned that eastern preserve is home to the most of same species that are found in western preserve, but there is no detail stating that the environment can provide for the western gazelle just same as it was in west. An attribute stating that the East Preserve serves as home for the Eastern Gazelle, which is closely related to western gazelle, is provided. But this information lacks the required proof to draw solid natural relations between the two different species of birds. Further detail on contrast between the two species would have given sound grounds for the argument to stand.
Furthermore, the difference in climate can serve as a substantial and sole reason needed for extinction of any species. However, it is mentioned that the only difference is in the amount of rain that eastern preserve gets. While there is no evidence stating that the species has small or no dependency on amount of rain, slightly low amount of rain could be the reason for their demise. The amount of rain in western region could be the reason for growth of only food that these gazelles consumed or, the amount of humidity in the air that had suited them. Substantiation clarifying that none of the other factors were affected that could prove vital for the survival of species would have made the argument far stronger.
Additionally, much evidence is not provided aiding to the assumption that predators had hunted these gazelle in large numbers. May be the predators in that area, were never able to catch or hunt them. Or, the gazelles mostly kept away from the region where these hunters preyed. Providing solid grounds for these arguments to be trustworthy would have made the prediction that predators took most of the western gazelle a lot substantial.
Conclusively, the lack of evidence renders the assertion doubtful and a further elaboration of factors that affect these gazelles in need.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 132, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...ted these gazelle in large numbers. May be the predators in that area, were never ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 363.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03305785124 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60420495498 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484848484848 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0062094416 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.1875 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6875 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179236007303 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616156358605 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766174932112 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0985915846618 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682198181032 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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