The conclusion that Dr. Field's observation which is based on observation centered approach is invalied due to numerous reasons primarily because of unwarranted assumptions that the demographic, ethnic, and physical structure available 20 years ago when Dr. Field made is observation is still available now when the author made his claims.
20 years is enough time for the ethnic structure of a comunty to be changed. The author may have done his research when the children lived with their parents rather than 20 years ago where the community live together as a clan. The claim by the author that the observation of Dr. Field is invalid fails to realise that the conclusion reached are at differet times. If the author had mentioned that they lived the same way as 20 years ago then the conclusion would have being right.
The evidence that the children talk of their biological parents may have being that their parents are no more living and now they are the responsibility of the whole comunity. As such, claiming that they Dr. Fields observation is invalid would be wrong as the children may be talking of their parent in the light that they miss them or are remembering their parents rather than claiming they are raised by their parents.
Due to the unwarranted assumptions, it fails to convince that the method of research by Dr. Field would be invalid
- The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones 66
- Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than 33
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...ent in the light that they miss them or are remembering their parents rather than claiming they...
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Suggestion:
...f research by Dr. Field would be invalid
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, still, then, talking of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 55.5748502994 36% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1139.0 2260.96107784 50% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 232.0 441.139720559 53% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90948275862 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.56307096286 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62261371634 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 204.123752495 54% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474137931034 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 334.8 705.55239521 47% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.1784969231 57.8364921388 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.375 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175325602283 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804703816314 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565783468949 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112308658991 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594069299964 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 48.3550499002 122% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 12.197005988 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 98.500998004 42% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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