"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
The writer has drawn a conclusion from disjointed and incomplete data. The reasoning given by him to prove that Adams Realty is superior to Fitch Realty leaves several questions unanswered and unless these are answered, an accurate conclusion cannot be drawn.
Firstly, the writer mentions that Adams’ has 40 real estate agents compared to 25 at Fitch, many of whom work part-time but doesn’t mention anything about the experience of agents at both places. It is probable that Adams has novice agents compared to virtuoso agents at Fitch so number of agents would play no significant role.
Secondly, the writer mentions that revenue of Adams was twice that of Flitch but provides no detail about years before that. For an accurate comparison, more data is needed. Also, it is likely that Adams’ commission charge is higher than Fitch making its revenue higher but that would not be preferable by customers.
Thirdly, it is mentioned that Adams’ home sales averaged $168,000 compared to Fitch's $144,000 but no clear information about the conditions of houses sold is mentioned. So, there are chances that Fitch indeed sold more houses compared to Adam but the condition of most houses it sold were worse.
Lastly, the writer makes an unjustified comparision about time taken by Fitch to sell a house ten years ago and time taken by Adams’ to sell a house last year but refrains from giving any details about the condition and neighbourhood of the houses. It is also likely that ten years ago the market was down and so less people were interested in buying as compared to last year.
In general, it may be said that the writer failed to make a convincing argument due to lack of details. However, the argument can be strengthen by providing data about experience of agents, commission rate, last 10-20 years revenue, and number of houses sold at both places. More information about the condition of houses and market should also be provided to accurately compare the time taken by both real estate firms.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1627 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.785 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.437 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.455 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.369 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.686 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 314, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...en years ago the market was down and so less people were interested in buying as com...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 339.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98230088496 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51466924327 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504424778761 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8904923256 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.642857143 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 5.70786347227 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312446033587 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104225957073 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824671393074 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159680049125 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690049426801 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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