In this argument, the author concludes that Adams Realty is more beneficial than Fitch Realty which are real estate firms in the town. To support this conclusion, the author points out that (1) Adams has more agents than Fitch has and most of employees of Fitch work part-time, (2) an average of outcomes of Adams in the last year was higher than Fitch’s one, and (3) Adams sold the author’s home in only a month last year while Fitch wasted four months in selling his another home ten years ago. Careful scrutiny reveals this argument is spurious and divisive in several respects.
Basically, this argument is problematic in that it assures that number of employees of those firms and their employee type play a vital role in calculating the quality of work of the two firms. Though, this might be the case, it is still possible that a few number of part-time workers can make more profitable outputs to their company. Perhaps, Adams has too many employees so that its manager would not be able to control effectively the workers. If this is true, this argument cannot convince us.
Secondly, even if we concede that the quality of work relate to the number of workers and their work type, this argument is still dubious in that it assumes that the last year is a typical period to estimate the two firms’ work efficiencies. In this regard, however, it is possible that Fitch had severe trouble in the last year, which led to the decline of its outcome while Adams had tremendous advantage to sell homes. For example, an area located Fitch had disasters that resulted to the significant decreasing of the value of the homes in the area. Until the author eliminate this possibility, this argument is still controversial.
Lastly, stating the author’s personal experience, he relies on another assumption that there is no change in house selling between ten years ago and the last year. In this regard, however, the reality may go against this assumption. Perhaps, in the last year, many residents moved to the area in Adams from other cities, thus there were more people who seek their houses than ten years ago. If this fact had influence largely on selling house of Adams, we cannot evaluate this argument properly.
To sum, this argument is poorly substantiated and fragile as it stands. To make it tenable, the author should inform that the effect of the number of workers and their type on the quality of work and the reliable evidence to prove that the last year was representative period to evaluate the two firms. To assess it better, we need to know that the extent to which the residential real estate market changed during the decade between the sales of these two homes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 234, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the employees') or simply say ''most employees''.
Suggestion: most of the employees; most employees
...dams has more agents than Fitch has and most of employees of Fitch work part-time, 2 an average o...
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Line 2, column 255, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...e the case, it is still possible that a few number of part-time workers can make more prof...
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Line 5, column 304, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ative period to evaluate the two firms. To assess it better, we need to know that ...
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Line 5, column 317, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
...to evaluate the two firms. To assess it better, we need to know that the extent to whi...
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'lastly', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'while', 'as to', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.257575757576 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.11553030303 0.15541462614 74% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0814393939394 0.0836205057962 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0549242424242 0.0520304965353 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0378787878788 0.0272364105082 139% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.126893939394 0.125424944231 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0113636363636 0.0416121511921 27% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.53144766195 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.030303030303 0.026700313972 113% => OK
Particles: 0.00189393939394 0.001811407834 105% => OK
Determiners: 0.123106060606 0.113004496875 109% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0132575757576 0.0255425247493 52% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0094696969697 0.0127820249294 74% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2703.0 2731.13054187 99% => OK
No of words: 466.0 446.07635468 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.80042918455 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.326180257511 0.378187486979 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.238197424893 0.287650121315 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.145922746781 0.208842608468 70% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0815450643777 0.135150697306 60% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53144766195 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 207.018472906 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472103004292 0.469332199767 101% => OK
Word variations: 53.3103569164 52.1807786196 102% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 25.8888888889 23.2022227129 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.0218898097 57.7814097925 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.166666667 141.986410481 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8888888889 23.2022227129 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.724660767414 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 49.7086313782 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.9 1.8405768891 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355677090473 0.441005458295 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.129010567364 0.135418324435 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.087560095237 0.0829849096947 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.580631974342 0.58762219726 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.18783527474 0.147661913831 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140163626204 0.193483328276 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106801534494 0.0970749176394 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.423287588494 0.42659136922 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0881131743518 0.0774707102158 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252336344535 0.312017818177 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128926126632 0.0698173142475 185% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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