"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
The author concludes that, of the 2 real estate firms (Adams and Fitch), Adams Realty is clearly superior and if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, use Adams Realty because ten yrs. ago, when author listed the home with Fitch, it took 4 months to sell while a year ago, when listed with Adams Realty, it took only a month to sell. The author’s line of reasoning is that Adams has 40 real estate agents while Fitch has only 25 most of which are part-time. Adam’s revenue on home sales last year was twice that of Fitch’s making it clearly superior. Ten yrs. ago, when author listed the home with Fitch, it took 4 months to sell while a year ago, when listed with Adams Realty, it took only a month to sell making selling the homes quicker and more profitable with Adam’s Realty. This argument is not convincing for various reasons.
First of all, the conclusion that Adams Realty is superior is based on the questionable assumption that the capacity of each real estate agent of Adam’s is same as that of each agent of Fitch’s. It is entirely possible that the capacity of each of Fitch’s agent is more and thus, even though 25 and part-time, they might do more quality work than 40 full-time agents of Adam’s. Hence, author’s generalization is unreliable.
Secondly, the author never addresses that the market conditions were same last year and ten years ago and will be same in the future. Suppose the market conditions were more favourable last year and hence it took only one month to sell the home and not because it was listed with Adam’s Realty. This can lead to debunking of the conclusion that if we want to sell home quickly we must choose Adam’s Realty.
Finally, author uses Future Past flaw. It is a flaw wherein it is assumed that what is true in the past will be true in the future. It assumes that the trend in revenue sales will be similar in the future as it was last year and hence Adam’s Realty will always have a greater revenue on home sales than Fitch’s Realty.
In conclusion, the argument is not a very strong argument. The author must provide support for the assumption each agent of Adam’s has similar potential as each agent of Fitch’s. Moreover, proper evidence has to be given for supporting the assumptions that market conditions were same 10 yrs. ago and last year and will be same in future and that revenue on home sales will be greater for Adam’s than that of Fitch’s always. Only with more convincing evidence could this argument become more than just a Future Past flaw.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 457 350
No. of Characters: 2025 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.624 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.431 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.172 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.197 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.605 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Ago
...rice, use Adams Realty because ten yrs. ago, when author listed the home with Fitch...
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Line 1, column 592, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Ago
...;s making it clearly superior. Ten yrs. ago, when author listed the home with Fitch...
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Line 9, column 304, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Ago
...hat market conditions were same 10 yrs. ago and last year and will be same in futur...
^^^
Line 9, column 438, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...r Adam's than that of Fitch's always. Only with more convincing evidence cou...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, as to, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 457.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74398249453 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59738984877 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.365426695842 0.468620217663 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.032909074 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.4 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.85 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30371862947 0.218282227539 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104474159939 0.0743258471296 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117703814018 0.0701772020484 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179052805551 0.128457276422 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917242260671 0.0628817314937 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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