The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries recommends to the company’s president that to improve the productivity of employees, electronic monitoring of the internet use of employees should be implemented. He states that by installing software to detect employees’ internet use, less time will be wasted, better work ethic will be fostered and the overall profits of the company will be improved. However, his recommendation depends on three unwarranted assumptions that if proven true, will significantly hinder the validity of his recommendation.
Firstly, the author assumes that the employees of Climpson Industries use their company issued computers for personal or recreational activities such as shopping or playing games. Perhaps the employees at Climpson Industries all have personal computers which they use for activities that are not work related. In the era of smart phones, it is also possible that the employees do all their personal or recreational activities on their smart phones. If these scenarios prove true, then the author’s recommendation will be ineffective as the installed software will have nothing to detect.
Secondly, the author assumes installing software to detect employees’ internet use will prevent employees from wasting time and foster a better work ethic. Perhaps the employees at Climpson Industries are usually derelict and dilatory in performing their duties. This may be as a result of incompetence or sheer indifference to the work assigned. In this scenario, installing software to detect employees’ internet use will have a negligible effect on time management and work ethic. A training on time management is more likely to give the desired result than installing software to detect internet use.
Finally, the author assumes that Climpson Industries will not incur additional costs for the procurement and installation of the software. It is likely that a sophisticated software like the one recommended by the vice president will be expensive. The high price is this software may significantly increase the company’s expenditure and reduce their overall profit. If this is true, then the author’s conclusion that installing software to detect employees’ internet use will increase the company’s overall profit holds no water
In conclusion, the vice president’s recommendation that the installation of software to detect employees’ internet use at Climpson Industries will prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic and improve the company’s overall profit may be true. However, as it stands now, his recommendation rests on three unwarranted assumption which significantly hinders its validity. To increase the persuasiveness of his argument, he needs to address the assumptions cited above.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 339, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'assumption' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'assumptions'.
Suggestion: assumptions
...commendation rests on three unwarranted assumption which significantly hinders its validit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2391.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 420.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69285714286 5.12650576532 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2230559364 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.411904761905 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 734.4 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.9386479967 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.833333333 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317414864343 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120324890521 0.0743258471296 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143536200861 0.0701772020484 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212395877012 0.128457276422 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06399878726 0.0628817314937 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 12.5979740519 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 339, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'assumption' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'assumptions'.
Suggestion: assumptions
...commendation rests on three unwarranted assumption which significantly hinders its validit...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2391.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 420.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69285714286 5.12650576532 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2230559364 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.411904761905 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 734.4 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.9386479967 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.833333333 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317414864343 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120324890521 0.0743258471296 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143536200861 0.0701772020484 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212395877012 0.128457276422 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06399878726 0.0628817314937 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 12.5979740519 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.