The Board of Directors of Monarch Books recommends Monarch Books to open cafe discounting the children`s section in the sense of competing with the Regal Books as they have recenlty opened cafe for attracting the customer. the recommendations made by the director to open the cafe seems irrelevant if this has to be based on the assumption mentioned above.
Firstly, the director mentions about discounting the children`s section as the popularity in these sections are about reduce since the national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of popular under age ten. However, there is no any mention that the population declination is noted in that particular city where the Monarch Books have been located. Just focusing on that assumption won`t help to succeed the recommendation as there is no mention of the numeric declination of the population of the age below ten. This store has been providing services to its customers since last twenty years. I don`t think there is necessary to open to cafe just to attract the customers. If the customers are facilitated with wide selection of books and they are highly satisfied with their services then the customers are arrested towards the books store instead. And the number of children studying the books might increase although there might be the case of the population declination. The director should have considered this part to before recommending to discount the children`s section. The concept of opening cafe might seem plausible but why to be involved in two business if they have sufficient customers in that one business. If there is such need of cafe then the director should have mentioned it with the pragmatic reasons.
Secondly, the director is mentioning about the Regal Books that`s opening the cafe in the their store to attract the customer`s and compete with Monarch Books. The writer doesn`t mentions about whereabouts of the customers i.e has this concept of opening the cafe really attracted the customers than without having cafe?? If attracted then by how much ? Has this scheme been beneficial to the owner and the customers too? All these question`s answers should have been answered by the writer so that the conclusion made by the writer would have been plausible.
In sum, the concept of opening the cafe in the Monarch Books would sound feasible if the director would better mentions the other assumptions that would justify his conclusion and would bolster the decision. The provided insufficient assumptions would put the work at risk if fully relied on these.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2200.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25059665871 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93029759426 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45584725537 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9702786052 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.789473684 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94736842105 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270385818469 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880284076984 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718033201055 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177974747355 0.128457276422 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676461205179 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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