We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening th

The author here has proposed opening a café in the monarch books he has based his judgement on fact that opening the café in book store will attract the customers. Even though this argument is agreeable but this ambiguous, in order to completely agree with the authors recommendation author had to answer ingenious queries like would this idea be convenient with the present customer base, how popular is the children book in this particular store and finally also should answer the pragmatic similarities between the Regal books and monarch books.

Firstly, the author has deliberated that opening the café will attract more customers but has failed to take into account that opening a café might affect the calm and peaceful environment provided by the monarch books, author has not addressed that whether the café will be open for all or just the member or patrons of the store by addressing this author could have cleared an important doubt. Author should have mentioned that by opening café in monarch books the ambience of the place is not change, and should have also mentioned that the by addition of café will address the desire of the customer and this will increase the customer. By mentioning whether café is available for the outsiders’ author could have addressed the queries could has crippled the recommendations.

Secondly, the author has mentioned that café is set up by discontinuing the children section based on national census. Sincere doubts raise as author has failed to mention the how popular the children books are in that particular store, as the national census may differ for the opinion of the that particular locality, author has also failed in mentioning whether children books bring in large patrons to the store as that would affect the consumer by addressing the questions like popularity of the children books author could have strengthened the argument.

Further, importantly author has not addressed the rudimentary questions about the similarity between the two books stores mentioned Regal and monarch, without mentioning similarities between the regal and monarch has mentioned that the regal has opened a café and it is profitable for it will work for the monarch also. But author has neglected the fact that the customer base in regal store maybe different that the monarch store. Another question did regal books had provision the for café from the origin? this question is also not answered by answering the above question the author could have made argument about the café more precise.

Finally, author had recommended the café for the board of directors but flaws in that recommendations and evidences that has provided by the author. Answering the some of the pragmatic question about the café like the practicality about it, mentioning the popularity and sales perspective about the children books where the café is advised to be constructed and finally advocating the similarity between the two books store mentioned the author could have made more tacit point

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Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 263, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
..., in order to completely agree with the authors recommendation author had to answer ing...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 753, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
... could have addressed the queries could has crippled the recommendations. Second...
^^^
Line 5, column 173, Rule ID: THE_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'how'?
Suggestion: how
...s raise as author has failed to mention the how popular the children books are in that ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 315, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...itable for it will work for the monarch also. But author has neglected the fact that...
^^^^
Line 7, column 470, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'provisioned'.
Suggestion: provisioned
...e. Another question did regal books had provision the for café from the origin? this ques...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 510, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...provision the for café from the origin? this question is also not answered by answer...
^^^^
Line 9, column 164, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...s provided by the author. Answering the some of the pragmatic question about the caf...
^^^^
Line 9, column 164, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...s provided by the author. Answering the some of the pragmatic question about the café like ...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.263969171484 0.25644967241 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.19267822736 0.15541462614 124% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0539499036609 0.0836205057962 65% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0423892100193 0.0520304965353 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00963391136802 0.0272364105082 35% => OK
Prepositions: 0.134874759152 0.125424944231 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0828516377649 0.0416121511921 199% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.64918655524 2.79052419416 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0115606936416 0.026700313972 43% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0019267822736 0.001811407834 106% => OK
Determiners: 0.156069364162 0.113004496875 138% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0366088631985 0.0255425247493 143% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00963391136802 0.0127820249294 75% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3044.0 2731.13054187 111% => OK
No of words: 492.0 446.07635468 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.18699186992 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.57801047555 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.367886178862 0.378187486979 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.288617886179 0.287650121315 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.197154471545 0.208842608468 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.132113821138 0.135150697306 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64918655524 2.79052419416 95% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 207.018472906 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.378048780488 0.469332199767 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 42.5221425625 52.1807786196 81% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 20.039408867 65% => OK
Sentence length: 37.8461538462 23.2022227129 163% => OK
Sentence length SD: 121.751420049 57.7814097925 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 234.153846154 141.986410481 165% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.8461538462 23.2022227129 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.846153846154 0.724660767414 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.58251231527 223% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 66.707942464 51.9672348444 128% => OK
Elegance: 1.96850393701 1.8405768891 107% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297106425295 0.441005458295 67% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.220261475018 0.135418324435 163% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0686451647948 0.0829849096947 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.751103768134 0.58762219726 128% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130825291776 0.147661913831 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182781416509 0.193483328276 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550371577737 0.0970749176394 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.609687496007 0.42659136922 143% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0597134454223 0.0774707102158 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238970111261 0.312017818177 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262422484608 0.0698173142475 38% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.87684729064 29% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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