The argument states that the Palean baskets which were previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea were not uniquely Palean To support this argument, the author points out that archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. However the author also points out that the Brim River being very deep and broad, and so the ancient Palean’s could have crossed it only by boat, and that no Palean boats were found by the archaeologists. However, the argument relies on a series of unsubstantiated assumptions, which render it unconvincing as it stands.
To begin with, the argument unfairly assumes that since the palea people were not found to possess a boat, they could not have crossed the brim river. However, the author provides no other evidence that this is the case. To the extent that there was no way that the Palean basket to reach the other side of the Brim River, the author's argument that this proves that the Palean basket was not uniquely Palean would be undermined.
Secondly, even if palea people were not found to possess a boat .But the author provides no evidence to substantiate the assumption that the Brim River was deep and broad form the day of inception. Lacking such evidence, it is equally possible that the Brim River once was a narrow and shallow stream and crossing it would not have required any boat as such.
In sum, to state that Palean baskets which were previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea were not uniquely Palean relies on certain doubtful assumptions. To Convince me that the Palea baskets were not uniquely Palean, the author must provide clear statistical evidence that "Palean" basket which was discovered in Lithos was native to Lithos.To better evaluate the recommendation, I would need more information about the history of the brim river and its civilization and prove that the brim river was deep and broad from the inception.
- Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archa 37
- The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Alta Manufacturing."During the past year, Alta Manufacturing had thirty percent more on-the-job accidents than nearby Panoply Industries, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Exper 69
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
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flaws:
minimum three arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 343 350
No. of Characters: 1657 1500
No. of Different Words: 137 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.304 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.831 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.494 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.3 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.416 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.491 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.681 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...illage of Palea were not uniquely Palean To support this argument, the author poi...
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Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...out that archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos, an...
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Line 1, column 347, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...llage across the Brim River from Palea. However the author also points out that the Bri...
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Line 3, column 328, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...h the other side of the Brim River, the authors argument that this proves that the Pale...
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Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... people were not found to possess a boat .But the author provides no evidence to s...
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Line 5, column 66, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...eople were not found to possess a boat .But the author provides no evidence to subs...
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Line 8, column 401, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...scovered in Lithos was native to Lithos.To better evaluate the recommendation, I w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 342.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05263157895 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78990887529 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426900584795 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 533.7 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.9045208803 57.8364921388 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.8 119.503703932 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.2 23.324526521 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265125523577 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127833598705 0.0743258471296 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118386327395 0.0701772020484 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181492174913 0.128457276422 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0898509602252 0.0628817314937 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 14.3799401198 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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