Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author concludes that the woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern which were initially found in the village of Palea were not uniquely Palean as traces of the basket were found in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The author makes the following conclusion based on a few assumptions such as a Palean basket which was found elsewhere other than Palea and there was no boat to be found which might have been used to cross the Brim River. The following assumptions lie on a thin line of thread and could be proven wrong. I would like to disagree with the author and would like to stand on the statement that the woven baskets found in Palea were only made in the village of Palea.
Firstly, the author states that traces of the similar "Palean" basket were found by the archaeologists in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The archaeologists might have made a mistake in assessing both the baskets before declaring that they basket is actually a "Palean" basket. The wear and tear on the actual basket might have erased its distinctive patterns due to long periods of exposure to natural causes and change in extensive changes in climate. This completely disposes the fact that the baskets were found in Lithos.
Furthermore the author makes the conclusion on the assumption that the Brim River is very deep and broad. The geographic patterns may change over time, i.e, vibrations in the tectonic plates beneath the surface of the earth may lead to a change in the outermost layer. Here since the river lies on the outermost layer of the earths crust, the Brim River which was once a pond with very less depth or literally nothing might have turned into a river overtime.
Finally the author makes a serious claim that there was no boat to be found and hence reaches his conclusion. A boat in the prehistoric times might have been possibly made by wood or any other material which easily decomposes into the soil unlike metals, plastic, fiber and other materials found today which have very less decomposition rate. So it is conspicuous that the boat which was made by the Palean citizens was decomposed and they actually reached Lithos but must not have carried any of their unique baskets as they wanted it to keep for themselves.
The authors explanation isn't actually a terrible one. The assumptions and conclusions made by the author are acceptable and might prevail but since the positives do not outweigh the negatives I would like to disagree with the author and would like to close that the baskets were uniquely found in Palea.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not exactly. better to say: maybe the sample size is too small.
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- better to say: maybe people in Lithos have boats.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 453 350
No. of Characters: 2132 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.613 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.706 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.459 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.312 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.953 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.37 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 30, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The author concludes that the woven baskets characterized by a particu...
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Line 1, column 493, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...have been used to cross the Brim River. The following assumptions lie on a thin lin...
^^^
Line 2, column 298, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... declaring that they basket is actually a 'Palean' basket. The wear and...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...that the baskets were found in Lithos. Furthermore the author makes the conclusion on the ...
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Line 4, column 2, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...t have turned into a river overtime. Finally the author makes a serious claim that t...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... wanted it to keep for themselves. The authors explanation isnt actually a terrible on...
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Line 5, column 25, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...or themselves. The authors explanation isnt actually a terrible one. The assumption...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, may, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2191.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85809312639 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62845510894 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439024390244 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.3186078002 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.9375 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1875 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289931248786 0.218282227539 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961631405647 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826050345033 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156530005849 0.128457276422 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10552200283 0.0628817314937 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.