Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
This argument concludes that the Palea baskets were not uniquely Palea. To support his/her contention he/she provides various evidence. But, one can spot numbers of flaws in the writer's argument through a careful analysis of this analytical piece.
The writer begins with the statement: Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palea people. Here the writer fails to provide how woven baskets found in Palea are unique to other woven baskets. Moreover, he does not provide who believed that they were made only by Palean people, whether it is his/her belief or archaeologist’s belief? In addition, there are possibilities that the people of the neighboring village may have made these baskets.
The argument state that only one basket found in Lithos which is identical to "Palean" which may be possible that someone from Palea village would have dropped basket in the Brim River and it somehow succeeded to cross the Brim River. This way it is possible that not Lithos people might have made such a woven basket rather it would have been reached to Lithos accidentally.
Another problem is that an author unnecessarily assumes that the Brim River was very deep and broad in ancient time because it is deep and broad in present time. In the ancient time, the Brim River might have narrow and dry. If this is the case then some people from Palea could have crossed the Brim River. Even we believe that the river was deep and broad in ancient time also, an author's contention that they could have crossed the Brim River only by boat further weakens his/her argument. In an Ancient people of that region might have built a bridge using wood to cross the river.
No Palean boats have been found till date does not imply that they have not made boats. The boats might have been destroyed by flood in the Brim River. There is also the possibility that the Palea boat may be found in the future. The writer does not provide information about whether the people of Lithos had made boats or not. There is also the possibility that the people of Lithos village might have crossed the river using their boats and bought woven baskets form Palean people.
In sum, the writer's evidence provides little support to the writer's argument that the Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. To further bolster he must provide better evidence. He must clear doubts such as whether the river was deep and wide in ancient time, whether Lithos people had made boats or not.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 453 350
No. of Characters: 2127 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.613 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.695 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.232 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.591 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.912 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.177 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
This argument concludes that the Pa...
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Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...t, one can spot numbers of flaws in the writers argument through a careful analysis of ...
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Line 4, column 490, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...deep and broad in ancient time also, an authors contention that they could have crossed...
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Line 6, column 163, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...evidence provides little support to the writers argument that the Palean bask...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3063.0 2260.96107784 135% => OK
No of words: 403.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 7.60049627792 5.12650576532 148% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 12.3805192461 2.78398813304 445% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461538461538 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 122.608016147 57.8364921388 212% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 145.857142857 119.503703932 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1904761905 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38095238095 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0810013877738 0.218282227539 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626101306265 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464254471897 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0625231444563 0.128457276422 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398186331692 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.0 14.3799401198 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 26.8 12.5979740519 213% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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