In the statement the author believe woven baskets are not only uniquely made by Palean people because a "Palean" basket is founded in Lithos and it was impossible for Palean to cross the Brim river to the neighboring country. The evidence from the argument seems plausible at first glance, yet further explanations and proofs are wanted to make the argument more comprehensive and convincing.
For starters, there is a "Palean" basket found in Lithos, and thus the author assumes it is definitely made from Lithos citizens. However, only one basket found in such area is not substantiated enough to verify Lithos people can also produce baskets. Maybe this basket was a counterfeit from a certain scholar who hates the Palean culture. Or maybe the basket was carried by the following citizens who was originated from Palean. Only if the arguer is able to provide a certain number of Palean baskets found in Lithos will he claim citizens in Lithos can also make the baskets.
Moreover, the author maintains that there is not any boats discovered near Brim river, so Palea people have no way to cross the river to Lithos. Nevertheless, Palean civilization is a prehistoric culture, which means a lot of facilities at the moment might be destroyed. Even if archaeologists do not discover any of boats, it does not follow those boats did not exist. Maybe boats were or maybe there was a tremendous natural disaster such as flood, which made all boats of Palea sunk in the bottom of the ocean. Even if there is no any boat built back that time, people might still try other ways to commerce with people in Lithos. For example, people might detour from other mountains and pass through a part of Brim river that was shallow and easy for people to swim through.
What's more, the author seems to believe the basket found in Lithos uses the exact the same skill as ones made by Palean. However, maybe the basket was made by simple craft which was ubiquitous at that time. Even if the author has proved that the basket found in Lithos was made exactly the same skill as what Palean people did, there are still some suspicious points that need to be clarified. If Lithos people can also make this kind of woven basket, they must share the similar textures, craft and tools. Yet the author fails to mentions this part in the argument. Unless the author can also provide with those identical ingredients and tools found in Lithos, he cannot contend Lithos people were also specialized in making wolen baskets.
To conclude, the author should provide more evidence to make his point more solid.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 447 350
No. of Characters: 2088 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.598 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.671 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.3 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.35 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.799 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 103, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... uniquely made by Palean people because a 'Palean' basket is founded in...
^
Line 3, column 24, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...d convincing. For starters, there is a 'Palean' basket found in Lith...
^
Line 5, column 532, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...e bottom of the ocean. Even if there is no any boat built back that time, people m...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...nd easy for people to swim through. Whats more, the author seems to believe the b...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 215, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ich was ubiquitous at that time. Even if the author has proved that the basket fo...
^^
Line 7, column 533, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mention'.
Suggestion: mention
...raft and tools. Yet the author fails to mentions this part in the argument. Unless the a...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, thus, for example, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 447.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85011185682 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54394780711 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456375838926 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5461465493 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.4 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.35 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167105280767 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576353271354 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517803723931 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0945624708959 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584412030387 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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