Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The author claims Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean for several reasons. He or she offers an interesting argument, but it suffers from logical flaws and gaps in evidence. While the connections suggested are reasonable, there are many other possible scenarios that should discourage us from assuming that Paleans baskets were indeed not distinct property.
To begin with, the author presents absence of a Palean boats record as the evidence to his or her claim. Yet there is no reason to believe that the boats did not really exist because of the mere fact that we can not found them. There are many explanations that could explain nonappearance of boats even though they really exist. What if the boats were rotten by water or wind because their materials were easy to decay? Or if the boats were made by steel, they may sink under the water too deep for us to detect them. Thus, we must answer the reason why we can not find the trail of canoes before claiming whether Palean baskets were unique or not.
Let us assume, though, that the boats indeed were not being present in Palean. We are then prompted to ask whether it was impossible to reach Lithos from Palean without the boats at prehistoric age. The author assumes that ancient Paleans could reach Lithos only by using boat because Brim River is too deep and broad to pass over currently. However the author offers no information about the prehistoric condition of the river. As we all know there are many environmental changes during history: sea level rise, formation of new lake, etc. Therefore we can not know about past environment condition by current state. Perhaps the river was shallow enough to cross over without any help in the past. What's more it may not exist during the ancient time. Without more thorough information about the past condition of stream, it is hasty to claim that Palean baskets were not exclusive.
Finally, even if we assume that the above assumptions will all hold up, we cannot take for granted the author's claim. What if there is an alternative path which does not include the Brim river between Palean and Lithos? As we all know, there is not only one way to go to other village. There may be alternative path that did not require crossing the river to reach Lithos. If the path really exist and residents in Palean chose the route to deliver their baskets, the baskets could be discovered in Lithos. Therefore, without the fact that there was only one way between these towns, we can not affirm that the baskets were particular for Palean.
A close examination of all the assumption made in the author's assertion reveals that he or she does not have enough justification to claim that Palean baskets were not distinctly Palean. Before we can access to more detailed information and data, it is too quick to claim whether the baskets were exclusive or not.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 343, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... deep and broad to pass over currently. However the author offers no information about ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 700, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...ross over without any help in the past. Whats more it may not exist during the ancien...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 55, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ation of all the assumption made in the authors assertion reveals that he or she does n...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, thus, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2374.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 497.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77665995976 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37633676611 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464788732394 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8808107594 57.8364921388 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.3076923077 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1153846154 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.34615384615 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.67664670659 299% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164712749179 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487451388492 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442815579183 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105448286445 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258259554656 0.0628817314937 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 343, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... deep and broad to pass over currently. However the author offers no information about ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 700, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...ross over without any help in the past. Whats more it may not exist during the ancien...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 55, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ation of all the assumption made in the authors assertion reveals that he or she does n...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, thus, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2374.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 497.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77665995976 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37633676611 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464788732394 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8808107594 57.8364921388 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.3076923077 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1153846154 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.34615384615 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.67664670659 299% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164712749179 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487451388492 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442815579183 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105448286445 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258259554656 0.0628817314937 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.